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Ikari Doki; DONE!
Topic Started: Apr 3 2011, 01:08 AM (612 Views)
Knell
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~Secretly Coreith~
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For once in my life
I do want to feel
something you'd call real
But I don't think that I've got time for these scars to heal
And the days just go by leaving questions in my mind
I guess I'll find the answers some day in another life


General
Name: Ikari Doki
Nickname: Ikari~kun, Ikari~nii or nii~sama. Mr. Lonely, Weeping Devil.
Age: 425 He looks 25
Gender: Male
Numero: Cuarto
Rank: Espada

Description
Height: 6'1"
Weight: 190
Hair: Long and spiky with a reddish orange color.
Eyes: Black
Appearance:
Ikari is very muscular and his hair is a red Orange color. He has a very depressing look on his face aspect for when he gets happy which is very rare. Also his mask is one the left side of his face, his mask takes the form of a jaw and is placed there as well as forming around his eye but it doesn't cover it but it covers his eyebrow. His eyes are like normal eyes his pupil are black but other then that they look normal. Ikari has broad shoulders and muscular calf muscles and forearms he has a very well toned body and slim and bulky figure.
Clothing:
Ikari has a brown head band that circles around his whole forehead and keeps his hair pent up a little. He doesn't really like wearing the stander arrancar uniform much but will if he has to. But he dose wear the pants but it is covered up by something which ill explain later on. Also his mask is one the left side of his face, his mask takes the form of a jaw and is placed there as well as forming around his eye but it doesn't cover it but it covers his eye brow. He wears a brown and sleeves shirt with a large collar and open at the chest area his hole is located where his heart is there for he has no heart but is still some how able to live with out because his organs can somehow still work with out it as if it was an imaginary heart still there. He doesn't exactly know how it works. His arrancar hole is covered up by his shirt. He has very muscular looking arms and legs his pants are white and covered with a brown and black sash they have black braces around the pants legs and 2 around his waist that look like belts. He has a brown cape or poncho like blanket he wears as well.

The pants them self are the standard arrancar pants. During battle he takes the cape off if he gets serious. His shoes are brown and black and looks like regular boots the leg part of the boots are hidden underneath his pants. When his soul is split in two 1 is a dog while the other is him, he still looks the same. He named the dog or second half of himself Baito, Baito can also talk. As Well as turn into a dog Baito can be a Arrancar person he has long green hair that comes to his neck and overlaps the right side of his face. And small doggy ears as well as having his right side of his face being covered by mask he has green eyes and a Arrancar robe that is to big for him he hides his sword in his sleeves. Ikari keeps his sword on the left side of his waist. When they fuse back together and Baito becomes a weapon he takes the form of a second katana. And when they go into resurrection Baito docent take the form of a weapon but a second conscience of Ikari.
Tattoo: His Tattoo is located on his left arm forearm.
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Personal
Personality: Ikari is what has a minor bi polar disorder and depression disorder. Sometimes hes a little happy and cheerful and sometimes hes really depressed. He also gets blood thirsty when angry or after having a really good fight. When he is happy he tends to talk to people more and tends to goof around and crack jokes every now and then. In a fight if Ikari's opponent isn't strong he will kid with them or wont take them seriously. When he is depressed he tends to not care what he kills or when he kills as long as he does kill to get something of his mind. And he does this also to stop remembering his past.

Ikari can also remember back to when he was a human (will explain in history) Which gives him deep emotional scars and explains why he has distaste for humans, shignimai, and Quincy. When Ikari is bloodthirsty he is pretty demonic a dark aura surrounds him and his opponent that shows just strong how strong his blood lust is. He will not stop attacking his opponent unless Baito calms him down. Baito's personality is allot like Ikari's but he is more cheerful most of the time when in the side he is just as depressed and lonely as Ikari and only puts up a cheerful act in order to make Ikari happy, since they are from the same soul Ikari knows this and also try's to put up a cheerful act sometimes in order to cheer Baito up.

They both appreciate the thought of how each other feels but deep down it makes them a little more depressed and they know it. Making it seem as if they where not even from the same soul at sometimes making them feel even more lonely. He usually is only happy when talking with someone or playing with or reading to Baito. When Baito and Ikari go into resurrection they are pretty much the same accept it is easier for ikari to get blood thirsty faster. Also Baito doesn't turn into a weapon hes actually just becomes a second personality of Ikari and helps to keep Ikari from becoming blood thirsty but he becomes bloodthirsty as well if Ikari becomes blood thirsty and ikari has been bloodthirsty for to long AKA more then 5 post. Baito also helps Ikari to stay focused and keeps him from clouding his judgment in a fight on weather or not to kill someone. Ikari also hates remembering his real parents and when he dose he becomes Very angry or depressed. But Baito usually calms him down.

Also Ikari also likes it when Baito uses his nicknames for him which are Ikari~Nii meaning Big brother or Nii~Sama meaning Master big brother. Baito also has a very childish voice. (think of Fuuta's from Katekyo Hitman Reborn.) And he tends to play around with girls calling them perverted names. He also can be very serious at times. But when not serious or depressed which he usually isn't he tends to be very childish and sometimes disregards what people say. His worst fears are being alone Again because it reminds him off his past and what happened, such as his abusing parents and his adoptive mother and dog dieing. Letting Baito die because of Baito dies he will be alone and a part of him will begone.

Ikari's Aspect of Death is Loneliness.
A few more facts



Goals: To Full fell his rulers wishes,~because his rules is the one that took him and Baito on so that they could be part of the group and wont be as lonely. And because of this he wants to make his ruler proud.
To become stronger~ so he can force people to like him if they don't do it out of free will.

Fears:
Being alone Again. ~ because it reminds him off his past and what happened, such as his abusing parents and his adoptive mother and dog dieing.

Letting Baito die. ~ Because of Baito dies he will be alone and a part of him will latterly begone.

His master dieing. ~ because he is the one that took him in. And gave him a home and a place to stay.

History:
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Combat Info
Special Ability:
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Techniques:
Normal Techniques:
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Strengths:
Speed ~ As an arrancar Ikari has great speed almost that of 1.2x of a captain. However it is not just his legs that are fast, his thinking speed (The rate at which he comes up with battle strategies and analyzing people). The speed at which his moves are produced are also fast. For Ikari one of the most important factors to look out for while facing him in battle is his speed.

Weaknesses:
Clumsy/ Forgiving ~ He can be very lazy at time and some slips up or makes a mistake in battle and sometimes allows his opponents to live if he feels pity for them or wants to fight them again in the future.

Bloodlust ~ If he gets blood thirsty he can sometimes slip up or be reckless in battle also he wont take pity on his opponent he can become blood thirsty if his opponent is a good enough fighter. Or if he taste or sees to much blood.

Strength And Defense~ Ikari's physical strength and Defense is that of 4/5's of a normal captains.

Combat Style:
Ikari's combat style is mostly close range however he can adjust his fighting style to combat that as far range or mid range if needed. When in Resurreccion his skills are mostly relied on switching between his weapons and moves to weaken the opponent and then finish them off. When fighting he will sometimes rely on kicks, or aerial like moves or spins then delivering a blow to the opponent.

Zanpakutou Info
Zanpakutou Name: llorón Diablo (Weeping Devil)
Sealed Zanpakutou:
Katana
The top one is Ikari's, the blade is black, and the rest of the sword including the sheath is a dark red. Baito has the same sword but his is the short one at the bottom.

Release Phrase: "Sigh Of Relieve"
Resurreccion Appearance:
During His Resurrection, he gains a red kanji on the left side of his forehead that means loneliness it is blood red and looks like a tattoo. His hair gets dark red 5 inches shorter and allot more spiky and his mask turns red and surrounds his whole mouth below his noes. The mask looks like that of the bottom part of a knights helmet but red, it has small opening in it that look like lines that allow him to breath. It also filters stuff out like smoke for instance. His whole body turns red as well and looks like it is covered with a slim body of red Armor. He gains long red Talons and a long red Devil tail which he can use to attack with. He can remove the mask over his face at will just by thinking.

When this happens it looks like it is being dissolved and he can also reconstruct it at will. When he goes into Resurrections he also gains two 8 inch devil horns on the top of his hair that are slightly covered by his hair and his hair is shorter as well. the devil horns are located on the left and right side on the to of his hair and are about 2 inches back and away from his head. The horns do not curl like a rams or do they come out the same way a bulls does it looks like a horn that is curved slightly like a crescent moon just not as much. His whole eyes turn pure black and his pupils become red with squiggly lines going threw the black parts of his eyes that look like vein's. Ikari also cry's blood when he uses his ability's but it doesn't effect how much blood he has. (Think of a black and red version of the bakuyugan from naruto.)

His armor also has an imprint of his abs and the bottom of his pants look like he has a cloak around it which just so happens to be a very strong bone type metal that is as lose and free as a piece of plastic, meaning he can move around free in it as if its not even there, his pants are a dark red and are kind of lose. They do down to where his ankles is and a little bit past them. His shoes are red and they look pointy. Also his shoulders look very board because they have a special type of shoulder pad and they have black lines threw it. His neck area has a small pointy piece of armor covering it up that resemble that of a pointy bib. And his belt area has an Design that makes it look like he is wearing a sash it also looks like he has a ruby place on it.
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Resurreccion Abilities:
Name of ability: Crisol Jinete (Horseman's Crucible)
When Ikari enters his Resurreccion, he gains the ability to grow from his very body any of four special objects to be "wielded". The item that is generated is picked by Ikari, and can be a pair of black and red gauntlets or a sword almost larger than Ikari himself. It could also take the form of two massive black wings on his back, or even a full suit of armor. Despite this being an already fairly odd ability, each of these items allows for access of a unique technique that makes it more formidable by far. Each of the items corresponds with one of the "Horsemen of the Apocalypse" and allows for unique abilities which are as follows.

Resurrecion Techniques:
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Edited by Knell, May 1 2011, 01:08 PM.
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Another Cero Espada has been dibs'd already so maybe aim for a lower number unless that character is denied.
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I choose 4th
Edited by Knell, Apr 5 2011, 08:34 AM.
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OK then:

-Your history mentions "1000 sad and lonely years" but your character is 425. I assume you mean 100, because your character is not being over 1000. Fix that.

-Yeah... your special ability can be Cero level, not Cero Oscuras level - you're the Cuatro you're not supposed to be the biggest bad ever, so lower that power from Black Cero to just Cero level.

-Arrancar can't use Loki, that's a Hollow-only technique. And in order to have Cero Oscuras you need a basic Cero. So swap those two around.

-Your Resureccion techniques are supposed to be under the "Resurreccion Abilities" header, not under your techniques header. So remove the big long explanation for your 'ability' and put your Res techniques there instead. Or just put them under it. Either way, they go down there.

-Oh and you're totally not as fast as 2 Captains combined. If you are then you suck at absolutely everything else. As in, your defenses and offenses should be woeful.

-As with your Special Ability, Lazy Boy Cero is not at Oscuras level but at 1.5x Cero power. Fix that.

-As for Famine: "and increases his speed by 6" <--- What? 6x? HELL NO.
Also every single feather is part of the effect? Also a no. The whole 'reduce strength and stamina' thing is iffy as well, since we don't use stats that doesn't really equate perfectly and 1/3 is too much anyway. 1/5 at most and it'd better fix if they move away.

-"If Ikari touches his opponents even if they have armor on, the opponents chest area will start to feel the worst pain of there lives especially where there heart is." <-- The armour thing is a no already, since armour is there to protect you. And the 'sending tiny ceros the size of the opponents nerves' thing is no as well. Basically, this technique is a huge no.

-Double strength for War? Make it 1.5x and the swords better have a post-limit and a cooldown.

-Death is...
"destroys the opponents cells and reistu particles a little with each hit because the cero is slowly going threw there molecules allowing the cero to pass right through there body and injure them, if hit" <--- No.
"When the vibrating cero is shot from the mouth or the palm of Ikari's hand (can only be shot from those places) it appears to just phase through the opponent when in fact its going through them destroying there reistu particles and cells in there body" <--- Even more no.

-Trial Switch is ok I suppose...

-Question though; how do you 'break' these weapons? Zanpakutou are extremely hard to break after all, or are these ones weaker than normal?

-All your resurreccion techs need cooldowns too.
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Editeeeeeed~
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Ok, I'm just commenting on one thing, since that's the biggest issue atm.

The horseman Death the most strongest of them all it has the power to create a strong cero that of a level 1.5x stronger to that of a Black Cero. <--

Whoa, what? 50% stronger than a Ceros Oscuras? That is a black cero, and it's ridiculously powerful. That's a no, and even if you did an attack like that, that should completely drain your reiatsu and make you go out of Ress form.

Nerf that please. Ceros Oscuras level is acceptable, but even then, it'd drain a huge chunk of your reiatsu and possibly make you go out of your ress form.
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Edited....
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  • Special Ability:
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    The cero is moving at 3/4's Ikari's speed. Also leaving a black line stream behind it. When the cero makes contact with the opponent it will sink at least 1-5 inch into them or straight through them. It will then expand into a huge orb made out of black cero and explode. This cero is 1/5 weaker then the normal cero but 3/5 faster then a normal cero.

    80% power but 160% speed? Yeah no, and the 'sinking into them' thing is also a no, just make it blow up like normal.

  • Strength/Weakness:
    1.5x speed but only 80% strength? No, 1.2x speed to make up for it at most. Also your defense should be 80% as well.

  • Lazy Boy Cero:
    How does it drain stamina? I'm gonna say remove this bit unless it's only a very minor drain since you're also damaging them a lot AND trapping them. Give this a four-post cooldown too.

  • Famine:
    1.5x speed is too much of a boost, make it 1.2x. I'm also confused about how this works, so basically a ball of energy is summoned and then feathers shoot out from the ball up and down but only half of them do something? And this lasts for three posts and over that time the person is 60% weaker in both strength and stamina?
    Can you please rewrite this so it's clearer and easier to understand? And sapping that much of someone's powers is way too much, so lower that too, make it 10% reduction each not 20%. Also, I assume this doesn't effect someone if they move out of the range of the feathers?

  • Pestilence:
    The auto-pain thing still makes me cringe, especially since it's "Cero Rays" through a foe's body instantly on touch, so that's still not acceptable. AND it damages them, so that's even worse - especially since Cero's aren't weak.

  • War:
    1.5x strength is too much, make it 1.2x instead.

  • Death:
    So it basically shoots a Gran Rey Cero that functions like a Shunko and is three times larger than normal? AND it increases his defense by 20% but decreases his speed to 25%... OK the latter part is ok but make it only 1.5x the size of a normal one (since they are normally huge) and make it last two posts and have a seven post cooldown. Yes, seven.

  • Trial Switch:
    As long as this activates the beginning of the cooldown for the weapon he swapped in, it's ok.
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edited.
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Uh, I still don't understand Pestilence or Famine, can you explain it in a few sentences to me?

Also, I'm still not liking Death, not 6 uses it only gets 3.
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