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| Elka | Aug 20 2009, 02:52 AM Post #1 |
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Wow, an Elka RP. (first ever!) In no way is this done, though. BIG thanks to Lord Silvermourn for the help on this thing. Background information: The country of Cengala was once known mainly for its large expanses of hot, dry desert, devoid of most life. While it was common knowledge that there was an expansive delta at the end of the Emerald River, which ran out the country’s eastern edge to the ocean, few realized the importance of this land. But those who did soon built a thriving agricultural civilization on the delta, naming their home city Mareeda, after the abundance of reeds nearer to the river. For many years, the small but wealthy city of Mareeda was left largely in peace. On the outskirts of the city, cattle, sheep and goats were farmed, as well as camels and horses, and grains and fruits thrived in the moist delta. Traders came and went, bringing news and exotic raw materials. While the original tribal government still held sway, there were talks of transitioning to a more democratic society, such as those that were seen further to the south. To this city on the edge of the desert, few things seemed to be going wrong. Then disaster struck. A drought came to the area, leaving the delta parched. Crops died, and animals suffered. But the city recovered, albeit slowly, and things seemed to go back to normal. Even so, pressure from surrounding countries was beginning to grow against the peaceful Mareeda. To the north, the unstable Tandeka went through several violent rebellions, unnerving the Cengalan leaders. In the west, Telezi, long known for its conquests, was expanding rapidly in all directions, on its way to engulfing entire countries. The danger seemed fairly far removed, until the Telezin army both began encroaching on Cengalan towns, digging up and destroying farm land, stealing animals, and worst of all, taking some young Cengalans as slaves. Now, after years of fear and violence, the Cengalans are determined to convince Telezin to stop their raiding and oppression. A group of former slaves, local leaders, and citizens is forming, trying to find both find the root of the problem, and stop it. Why is Telezi taking slaves in the first place? What are they looking for beneath the fields? The last thing the people of Mareeda and the rest of Cengala want is more fighting, but that seems to be what Telezi wants. No matter what happens, Cengala will try to stop Telezi at all costs. Notes on culture: The farming style and basic culture of Mareeda is somewhat similar to that of the Nile delta. However, in clothing and architecture, it is closer to ancient Persia. Religion is largely monotheist in Mareeda, and polytheism still holds out in more isolated areas of Cengala, though religion does not dominate the culture. Cengala used to be made up of many warring tribes, but these have in the past two hundred years become one, based in Mareeda, with a single chief (Jengo) and many advisors. The role of women in Cengala is growing at the this time, even if their rights still are not quite equal to men’s. The language, spoken throughout most of the countries in the area, resembles Swahili. (Please write in English anyways. *grins*) Their symbol is a black oryx, often on a red field (this design is sometimes used for a flag, though there are several different flags being used there now). North of Cengala, Tandeka had a monarchy for many years, but revolution has overthrown it, sending the country into turmoil. Theirs is a more forested country than the desert Cengala, and also more mountainous. The revolutionaries are known for wearing indigo or carrying an indigo flag (sometimes a bear), to contrast with the deep orange pine that symbolized of the old leadership. Telezi, west of Cengala still maintains monarchical government, currently led by King Kondo. While not as unstable as Tandeka, there is considerable unrest at the borders, as the country tries to expand. Much of the area is grassland, though to the north and west, forest takes over. To the south is the small country of Aldi, a democratic society with stable leaders. Aldi is the closest thing to an ally that Cengala has at the current time. They are involved in much trade with Cengala, and is bordered on two sides by ocean, with a wide, dry scrub running along their northern border. Their flag is light blue with a white gull. Southwest of Cengala is the country of Elpera, ruled by an old monarchy. Not openly hostile or friendly to any country at the current time, Elpera is rather isolationist state. Much of the country is forested, though development and manufacturing are starting to emerge there ahead of the other countries. Their flag iis a circle of 8 red stars on a blue field. In addition!: In a rather bold move on my part, I've decided that the medical technology of this RP is going to have to be somewhat equal to what we have today in rate of survival and such. I really don't want half the characters dying of the flu after about a page. Despite this, I want to try to keep it seeming like a rather advanced form of herbalism, rather than our technology today. Also, I was intending to have this set in a sort of ancient time period, but some ideas could be taken from other times. Map! (sorry, my handwriting sucks.) http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs51/f/2009/312/f/7/Map_of_Somewhere_by_LadyElka.jpg Rules (aka, ‘dem things ya’d better do if ya wanna stay’): •All the basic rules that everyone on here had better know (that means no sues, power play, text speak, etc.) •Write in third person, please, just to keep things consistent •No inappropriate stuff. Use your own judgment, and keep things around PG-13 (this includes excessive cussing). •No double posting, unless you have a very good reason. •Try not to include any magic or anything like that. Some may be allowed, just ask me first. •Unless you come up with a really awesome other example, keep characters human. •Characters are allowed to have a transport animal, such as a horse or camel. Horses are prefered, for obvious reasons. •You can use a character from any of the countries listed, though Cengala is definitely the main focus of this RP. • Post character profiles and questions, comments, concerns on the OC thread only. •Have fun! Character form:
Edited by Elka, Nov 9 2009, 06:19 PM.
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It seemed like a good idea at the time... How are we to live in the present, look to the future and remember the past? If anybody has the number of the wise man on the mountain, could I please have it? I like black licorice and the color green. There's a reason for this madness. I fell off the Train of Thought. Burr shot Hamilton. Elka wants a red hat. I can't find any relation in the statements above. If you can, please tell me, so I can get rid of it. | |
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| Silvermourn | Aug 21 2009, 10:00 PM Post #2 |
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The Redneck, the Cynic, the Nerd, and the Hopeless Romantic
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Well Elka, let's see, I personally don't like to edit for grammar, but I can if that's what you were looking for. However, random things I caught- this line sounds a bit awkward: "Even so, pressures from surrounding countries were growing on the peaceful country." For a suggestion: Even so, pressure from surrounding countries was beginning to grow against the peaceful Mareeda. As the rp goes, the idea and the background is fairly solid, and it's interesting. As you probably know if you've even glanced at my stuff, I prefer depth, but this one seems to cover all of the bases. I would however define a couple of things more clearly, first the focus of the rp. Some people when signing up for an rp will want one that focuses on character interaction, others will want combat and war, and others will want even odder things. So while it doesn't have to be defined exactly in words, I feel that I understand I'm just not sure other people will, but I could always be wrong. Second, the general technology level, you defined the medical technology and it's practice, but not the technology for weapons and transportation and the like, although I feel it's implied that it's medieval. However depending on how you swing the medical thing, it can't be equivalent to present day without something making it so, either advanced "alchemy", some form of magic or religious themed power, a new science, ect. With your roleplay not being themed around magic and typical fantasy style traits as far as I can tell, I'm not sure how you intend to do it. Other than that, vague is actually an option, if you can get people to join, either by adding something that really hooks people, or by finding something in the roleplay that already does. Then developing aspects of the world as you go along could probably work just as well as the other method, I do both, but I'm long winded so my background is frighteningly long. You seem to have done well avoiding that and still being fairly complete though. ((Not being an expert, remember that everything I say is an opinion, probably not even an educated one.)) |
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"I mourn that which may have been but will never be." "Stupidity is a wound that bleeds forever; Intelligence is a blade that stays forever sharp" "An armed man will kill and unarmed man with monotonous regularity" "Nothing adds a little class to a sniper course like a babe in a Ghillie suit." "You have the rest of your life to solve your problems. How long you live depends on how well you do it." "Make your attacker advance through a wall of bullets. I may get killed with my own gun, but he's gonna have to beat me to death with it, 'cause it's going to be empty." | |
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