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| Topic Started: May 4 2009, 01:06 AM (190 Views) | |
| Angelia | May 4 2009, 01:06 AM Post #1 |
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Character Template Name: Pika Kaze Age: 14 Gender: Female Profession*: Mechanic/Engineer/Coordinator/Breeder Appearance: ![]() History: Her parents and her always lived in the forest. She was mostly trapped from the outside world, always in her own paradise. Sitting on a stump, eating peaches and apples while people died in car crashes, fires, murder, and all without her knowing. To her, the world was only her backyard and her backyard was the forest. That is, until a fire started. It wasn't long ago, only two years. But that fire had destroyed her life. Killed her family, only leaving two eggs for her, and in order to push away the fear, sadness, regret, and pain, she locked away her memories. Locked away forever. In other words, this history is a secret between you and I. However, after she whipped her own memory clean, she was taken in by a mechanic engineer man after he found her on the edge of the village. She was too afraid to go in, so she stood there looking dumb at the villagers. She worked as a student under him, thankful for the shelter and bliss given to her. She cared for the egg that were found with her until it hatched into a Gulpin. Two years passed, and the mechanic, who was a father and teacher to her, decided to let her go on the journey after she mastered the skill of 'kicking her neighbors' butts at a Pokémon battle with her eyes closed.' Personality*: A pure fun-loving character. She always has a carefree smile on her face, and she is immensely hyper. However, she gets shy and bubbly around boys. On the other hand, despite looking dumb, she's actually very smart. She's also very stubborn. To add to this, she gives a small tomboyish aura about her, having been working in oil and gas for as long as she could remember. Starting Pokemon: ![]() Nickname*: Koli Differences*: Koli is more solid with a darker feather. Starting Town: Nogou Village Poketech Color: ![]() Other: All good. PS. The mechanic was her teacher. Edited by Angelia, May 4 2009, 03:41 AM.
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| Zygon | May 4 2009, 02:50 AM Post #2 |
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Okay....first of all, you can't 'over profession' your charactor, to answer your question. Your profile is close to being able to be accepted, but not quite. Here's what you need to do. * Tell us why you aren't in school, even though you were in the forest, you weren't by the time you were leaving to go on your Journey. * How did this new engineer take you in? Did he adopt you from a foster home? I doubt anyone is just going to take a 12 year old girl off the street. More explaination please. |
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| Angelia | May 4 2009, 03:03 AM Post #3 |
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Is that better? |
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| Zygon | May 4 2009, 03:13 AM Post #4 |
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Okay, now that we got the information down, you got just a little editting to do. You got alot of run-on sentences, mainly near the end. If i counted them all up, you probably wouldn't have enough sentences because of this. Seperate them a little, please. |
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| Angelia | May 4 2009, 03:24 AM Post #5 |
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? I have enough? History: 2 paragraphs with 4 sentences or more. Me: 1: 4 2: 6 3: 5 Total: 3 paragraphs and 15 sentences. Am I wrong? |
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| Zygon | May 4 2009, 03:27 AM Post #6 |
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No, i said probably. Give me a little break, it's 3am here. Either way, you have some huge run on sentences going on there. |
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| Angelia | May 4 2009, 03:41 AM Post #7 |
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Don't blame me for showing off.
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Is that a little better? |
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| Pikaman | May 4 2009, 03:35 PM Post #8 |
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Ugghhhh that fist sentence is bothering me! I suppose it's fine, but how did she lock her memories away? If you can't think of something just say Uxie *I think that's the right one >< * found you and you asked it to lock your memories away. |
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Profile | Journey | PC | Trading Place Objectives: - Teach Kracken Bounce - Teach Sneasel Beat up before evolving it - Continue exporing and battling ![]() - Possibly join a team and/or found a gym? My Team: PC: My want list: and Eenck when it gets an emoticonPossible Future team: Possible future gym team:
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| Angelia | May 4 2009, 04:57 PM Post #9 |
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Would that have been a allowed? o.o Cause, if it is, I'll go ahead and do it. |
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| Pikaman | May 4 2009, 05:11 PM Post #10 |
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Never mind, admin overruled my juristiction. *sp?* >< Accepted. |
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Profile | Journey | PC | Trading Place Objectives: - Teach Kracken Bounce - Teach Sneasel Beat up before evolving it - Continue exporing and battling ![]() - Possibly join a team and/or found a gym? My Team: PC: My want list: and Eenck when it gets an emoticonPossible Future team: Possible future gym team:
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