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| Topic Started: May 1 2009, 02:49 PM (140 Views) | |
| Nuzleaf | May 1 2009, 02:49 PM Post #1 |
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Age: 17 Gender: Male Profession*: Trainer Appearance: ![]() History: Oak was born in a small forest underneath an Oak tree, thus receiving his name 'Oak'. He was born with green hair and eyes which made some people around the village treat him differently. Some would look at him like he was an alien while others would bow down to him like he was some type of God. Whatever it was Oak ignored it. Other than the place of birth, the hair color, and the treatment, Oak's life was just as normal as all the other kids in Alternia. Since birth Oak loved Pokémon, sports, and all the other activities everyone else did. The only thing different was he seemed to be more skilled with Pokémon than the other kids. When Oak was 5 his parents gave him his first Pokémon. It was a small leaf Pokémon known as Turtwig. Oak would spend every free day he had training with his beloved Pokémon. They would challenge wild Pokémon and trainers. They would never deny a challenge. One day when Oak was 12 years old two strange people wearing a strange uniform challenged him to a battle. With him and Turtwig's mentality to never deny a challenge they accepted. About midway through the battle one of the guys turned his attack on Oak, the other then snatched Turtwig and the two ran off. Oak bowed to never touch another Pokémon, pokeball, or anything related ever again, and erased all memories of Pokémon out of his head. It has been 5 years with no Pokémon but Oak still can’t seem to get the memory of his Turtwig out of his mind. The nightmare of his Pokémon and friend getting snatched right before his eyes still haunts him. Finally, after thinking hard about the situation he has decided to do what he should have done 5 years ago; he is going to go after his stolen Turtwig. Now, with the help of an ordinary Koffing his dad found in Kijutsu City Oak is beginning his journey. Starting Pokémon: Koffing Differences: Although Oak is not Koffing's original trainer, he listens to his every command, and Oak has full control over Koffing. Starting Town: Nogou Village Poketech Color: Green Edited by Nuzleaf, May 2 2009, 12:33 AM.
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| Roses are Red | May 1 2009, 07:49 PM Post #2 |
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I am sorry but I cannot accept this registration because of this issue: -Grammar errors There's an overabundance of commas in your reg. You honestly don't need a comma before the word 'and' unless it is part of a list of three items or more ('walked, jogged, and ran' but not 'walked, and ran'). Commas replace the word and in other situations so it's a bit of a redundancy. Also, when using a contraction, an apostrophe needs to be used (can't). Please fix these issues and post back here when you are finished. Thanks! |
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| Nuzleaf | May 2 2009, 12:41 AM Post #3 |
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Sorry about that. I edited it. Hope its better now. |
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My Links: (My Profile),(My Journey) My Pokémon: Lv.10 Lv.9 Lv.7 Lv.10 Lv.8 Lv.14
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| Crimson | May 3 2009, 03:31 PM Post #4 |
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ACCEPTED. You fixed your comma and contraction errors, so I'll create your profile now. |
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