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Apr 19 2009, 10:44 AM
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Name: Jeremy Harris Age: 28 Gender: Male Profesion*: Pokemon Trainer(Former Teacher) Appearance:  History: Jeremy had a difficult time in German schools because the only language he was taught was English. Because he finally learned German in sixth grade, he did exponentially better that year. In fact, it was such a great year that he skipped right over seventh grade, ending up in eighth grade the next fall. In eighth grade he was tortured immensely by bullies because he was shorter than everyone else, not to mention he was smarter than everyone else.
In ninth grade he came across his first pokemon encounter while doing his homework. It was a Zubat that had wandered into his mother's garden. He then sketched it and went to show his father. "Hey dad I saw this bat-like animal out in the garden today, d'you know anything about it?" he said showing his father the sketch.
"Ummm son I believe what you saw was a pokemon."
"A poke-wha?"
"A pokemon son. A Zubat to be exact."
"Wow... amazing."
Three years passed after this encounter and there were many more after that. Jeremy, now eighteen, was on his way to college to become a teacher. College was tough but he got through at last. On the way through he made many new friends, including his soon to be boss, Principal Dreery.
After four years of college, Jeremy was finally on his way to becoming a teacher. After many job applications, Jeremy finally got a job as a fifth grade teacher. Many of his students were stunned by his young age, so he took this to his advantage to make the kids work hard to be like him.
Six years later, he met an old student of his and he had a pokemon with him. "Oh hello Steven how's life been after fifth grade?"
"Oh man Mr. Harris, life's been great! I've been working my hardest to become a pokemon trainer!"
"Hm? I remember actually when I was in ninth grade I saw a Zubat and that was the first pokemon I ever saw."
"Well Mr. Harris..."
"Oh c'mon call me Jeremy"
"O, Okay Jeremy? Well anyways, Do you have a pokemon?"
"Well, no but..."
"Oh man Jerry you're really missing out! Here take this!" Steven then handed Jeremy a pokeball.
"Wow Steven thanks." The bell then sounded and Steven ran off.
Later that night Jeremy quit his job, packed his things and left to start a pokemon journey! Starting Pokemon:  Nickname*: Leo Starting Town: Mellenia Poketech Color:  Other: guitar - http://www.guitarcenter.com/Epiphone-Limited-Edition-Wilshire-Electric-Guitar-518527-i1391552.gc and a violin
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Lyrics to a meaningful song
Spoiler: click to toggle [Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Now he was just your average everyday traffic jam competitor With half a gram, walkin' in the club tryin' to set it off She had two silicon weapons of mass distraction Nipples like screw-in cleats, damn near blastin' Through her skin tight blouse, she lookin' for some action Said her hubby was out of town and started askin' If he'd like to go to her house. I think that's when he realized he couldn't do it Looked at her finger, a diamond from her ring Hit his eye, he couldn't linger He started feelin' guilty for everything they were up to He took a deep breath said, "you know what, I'd love to But evidently there is already someone who loves you" She looked at him like he insulted her and said, "*&^% you Look at your pupils, I know what that stuff do Mr. Goody Twoshoes, Call me out, I'll call you out too." Now he was weak as her, he had a ring too.
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Together in their deceitful ways embracing the lust They got carried away like a dog chasin' a bus They were back at her house in another man's bed And gettin 'freaky deaky' while the husband sped home To see his wife cause his job had got done early Meanwhile they're wreckin' the room And talkin' all dirty, and sweaty The hubby stopped and got some flowers so pretty And a bottle of wine to spend some time with his sweetie Gets home, sees a car in the yard and he's thinkin' hmmm? Walks up the driveway opens the door and goes numb Just about the time he's gonna yell "honey I'm home" A trail of clothes down the hall leading to passionate moans Changed his tone, tip-toed to the gun cabinet Grabbed a gun his daddy gave him that he used in Vietnam Walk down the hall kicked in the door said "surprise" Sat down on the bed with guns and roses and wine
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Hubby said "how you two love birds doing? You havin' fun? Don't cover up your nakedness now, What's done's done" He made his wife call her parents Made the dude call his wife and daughter And told them to come over, "let's talk about life" And then hubby called the preacher 'cause you want God involved When the victim of infidelity has got a revolver and the guests straggled into the room one at a time Realizing what was happening and then wishing they were blind He told the preacher who had married them back in the day That he was right 'the lord works in mysterious ways' Then he addressed the room waving the gun carefree Saying "ladies and gentlemen you've been called here to see Two naked embarrassed humans in a bed that I bought They were havin' great sex about the time they got caught" Then he laid the gun down on the bed so relaxed And said "I'm leaving' feel free to shoot me in the back"
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Journey & Profile
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Apr 19 2009, 11:31 AM
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The length is good, but the sentences are very choppy and rushed. Put similar sentences together, and that will make it a smoother read. The paragraphs also need to be broken up, big blocks of text make things harder to read. Everytime you change subjects you should start a new paragraph.
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 Mime Jr.  Level 8 Moves: Confusion, Barrier, Copycat, Tickle, Meditate Move Tutor: Psybeam COMPLETED Personality: * Goofy * Timid * Determined * Would do anything for Zygon Notes: Amazingly Loyal and powerful Pokémon
Bonsly!
 Bonsly  Level 7 Moves: Fake tears, Flail, Copycat, Explosion Move tutor: Low kick: COMPLETED! Personality: * Tough * Easily offended * Stubborn Notes: Unlike any other bonsly, ever
Buizel!
 Buizel  Level 8 Moves: SonicBoom, Growl, Water Sport, Quick Attack, Water Gun. Move Tutor: None yet. Personality: * Confident * Quick on his feet * Jolly * Will go to extreme lengths to win Notes: Knows how to do a backflip. XD



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Apr 19 2009, 11:42 AM
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Hows dis?
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Lyrics to a meaningful song
Spoiler: click to toggle [Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Now he was just your average everyday traffic jam competitor With half a gram, walkin' in the club tryin' to set it off She had two silicon weapons of mass distraction Nipples like screw-in cleats, damn near blastin' Through her skin tight blouse, she lookin' for some action Said her hubby was out of town and started askin' If he'd like to go to her house. I think that's when he realized he couldn't do it Looked at her finger, a diamond from her ring Hit his eye, he couldn't linger He started feelin' guilty for everything they were up to He took a deep breath said, "you know what, I'd love to But evidently there is already someone who loves you" She looked at him like he insulted her and said, "*&^% you Look at your pupils, I know what that stuff do Mr. Goody Twoshoes, Call me out, I'll call you out too." Now he was weak as her, he had a ring too.
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Together in their deceitful ways embracing the lust They got carried away like a dog chasin' a bus They were back at her house in another man's bed And gettin 'freaky deaky' while the husband sped home To see his wife cause his job had got done early Meanwhile they're wreckin' the room And talkin' all dirty, and sweaty The hubby stopped and got some flowers so pretty And a bottle of wine to spend some time with his sweetie Gets home, sees a car in the yard and he's thinkin' hmmm? Walks up the driveway opens the door and goes numb Just about the time he's gonna yell "honey I'm home" A trail of clothes down the hall leading to passionate moans Changed his tone, tip-toed to the gun cabinet Grabbed a gun his daddy gave him that he used in Vietnam Walk down the hall kicked in the door said "surprise" Sat down on the bed with guns and roses and wine
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Hubby said "how you two love birds doing? You havin' fun? Don't cover up your nakedness now, What's done's done" He made his wife call her parents Made the dude call his wife and daughter And told them to come over, "let's talk about life" And then hubby called the preacher 'cause you want God involved When the victim of infidelity has got a revolver and the guests straggled into the room one at a time Realizing what was happening and then wishing they were blind He told the preacher who had married them back in the day That he was right 'the lord works in mysterious ways' Then he addressed the room waving the gun carefree Saying "ladies and gentlemen you've been called here to see Two naked embarrassed humans in a bed that I bought They were havin' great sex about the time they got caught" Then he laid the gun down on the bed so relaxed And said "I'm leaving' feel free to shoot me in the back"
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
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Spoiler: click to toggle Name: Jeremy Harris Gender:  Age: 28 Inventory 3x Poke balls  1x Poketech 1x guitar 1x violin Pokémon on Team Chatot Level 5 | ( Leo ) Peck, Growl  0/5
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Apr 19 2009, 11:49 AM
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When the stars stop shining, dreams will shatter before your eyes. Know that you're not alone!
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You broke it up better, but it is still choppy. The first paragraph especially.
Born in berlin, Jeremy's life has always been strange. Growing up, school was confusing because his parents never taught him german. The only language Jeremy knew was English. It took very many speech classes up until sixth grade to fully learn the language.
^^^^ That whole thing should be put in 2-3 sentences.
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BEFORE: Growing up, school was confusing because his parents never taught him german. The only language Jeremy knew was English.
AFTER: Jeremy had a difficult time in german schools because the only language he was taught was english.
Before:
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My Team (Updated 6/2)
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 Mime Jr.  Level 8 Moves: Confusion, Barrier, Copycat, Tickle, Meditate Move Tutor: Psybeam COMPLETED Personality: * Goofy * Timid * Determined * Would do anything for Zygon Notes: Amazingly Loyal and powerful Pokémon
Bonsly!
 Bonsly  Level 7 Moves: Fake tears, Flail, Copycat, Explosion Move tutor: Low kick: COMPLETED! Personality: * Tough * Easily offended * Stubborn Notes: Unlike any other bonsly, ever
Buizel!
 Buizel  Level 8 Moves: SonicBoom, Growl, Water Sport, Quick Attack, Water Gun. Move Tutor: None yet. Personality: * Confident * Quick on his feet * Jolly * Will go to extreme lengths to win Notes: Knows how to do a backflip. XD



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Apr 19 2009, 11:52 AM
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well would you mind if I used that XDXDXD
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Lyrics to a meaningful song
Spoiler: click to toggle [Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Now he was just your average everyday traffic jam competitor With half a gram, walkin' in the club tryin' to set it off She had two silicon weapons of mass distraction Nipples like screw-in cleats, damn near blastin' Through her skin tight blouse, she lookin' for some action Said her hubby was out of town and started askin' If he'd like to go to her house. I think that's when he realized he couldn't do it Looked at her finger, a diamond from her ring Hit his eye, he couldn't linger He started feelin' guilty for everything they were up to He took a deep breath said, "you know what, I'd love to But evidently there is already someone who loves you" She looked at him like he insulted her and said, "*&^% you Look at your pupils, I know what that stuff do Mr. Goody Twoshoes, Call me out, I'll call you out too." Now he was weak as her, he had a ring too.
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Together in their deceitful ways embracing the lust They got carried away like a dog chasin' a bus They were back at her house in another man's bed And gettin 'freaky deaky' while the husband sped home To see his wife cause his job had got done early Meanwhile they're wreckin' the room And talkin' all dirty, and sweaty The hubby stopped and got some flowers so pretty And a bottle of wine to spend some time with his sweetie Gets home, sees a car in the yard and he's thinkin' hmmm? Walks up the driveway opens the door and goes numb Just about the time he's gonna yell "honey I'm home" A trail of clothes down the hall leading to passionate moans Changed his tone, tip-toed to the gun cabinet Grabbed a gun his daddy gave him that he used in Vietnam Walk down the hall kicked in the door said "surprise" Sat down on the bed with guns and roses and wine
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Hubby said "how you two love birds doing? You havin' fun? Don't cover up your nakedness now, What's done's done" He made his wife call her parents Made the dude call his wife and daughter And told them to come over, "let's talk about life" And then hubby called the preacher 'cause you want God involved When the victim of infidelity has got a revolver and the guests straggled into the room one at a time Realizing what was happening and then wishing they were blind He told the preacher who had married them back in the day That he was right 'the lord works in mysterious ways' Then he addressed the room waving the gun carefree Saying "ladies and gentlemen you've been called here to see Two naked embarrassed humans in a bed that I bought They were havin' great sex about the time they got caught" Then he laid the gun down on the bed so relaxed And said "I'm leaving' feel free to shoot me in the back"
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
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Spoiler: click to toggle Name: Jeremy Harris Gender:  Age: 28 Inventory 3x Poke balls  1x Poketech 1x guitar 1x violin Pokémon on Team Chatot Level 5 | ( Leo ) Peck, Growl  0/5
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Apr 19 2009, 12:05 PM
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When the stars stop shining, dreams will shatter before your eyes. Know that you're not alone!
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I suppose, but keep in mind there are other things that need fixing.
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My Team (Updated 6/2)
Spoiler: click to toggle Mimey!
 Mime Jr.  Level 8 Moves: Confusion, Barrier, Copycat, Tickle, Meditate Move Tutor: Psybeam COMPLETED Personality: * Goofy * Timid * Determined * Would do anything for Zygon Notes: Amazingly Loyal and powerful Pokémon
Bonsly!
 Bonsly  Level 7 Moves: Fake tears, Flail, Copycat, Explosion Move tutor: Low kick: COMPLETED! Personality: * Tough * Easily offended * Stubborn Notes: Unlike any other bonsly, ever
Buizel!
 Buizel  Level 8 Moves: SonicBoom, Growl, Water Sport, Quick Attack, Water Gun. Move Tutor: None yet. Personality: * Confident * Quick on his feet * Jolly * Will go to extreme lengths to win Notes: Knows how to do a backflip. XD



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Apr 19 2009, 07:09 PM
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Lyrics to a meaningful song
Spoiler: click to toggle [Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Now he was just your average everyday traffic jam competitor With half a gram, walkin' in the club tryin' to set it off She had two silicon weapons of mass distraction Nipples like screw-in cleats, damn near blastin' Through her skin tight blouse, she lookin' for some action Said her hubby was out of town and started askin' If he'd like to go to her house. I think that's when he realized he couldn't do it Looked at her finger, a diamond from her ring Hit his eye, he couldn't linger He started feelin' guilty for everything they were up to He took a deep breath said, "you know what, I'd love to But evidently there is already someone who loves you" She looked at him like he insulted her and said, "*&^% you Look at your pupils, I know what that stuff do Mr. Goody Twoshoes, Call me out, I'll call you out too." Now he was weak as her, he had a ring too.
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Together in their deceitful ways embracing the lust They got carried away like a dog chasin' a bus They were back at her house in another man's bed And gettin 'freaky deaky' while the husband sped home To see his wife cause his job had got done early Meanwhile they're wreckin' the room And talkin' all dirty, and sweaty The hubby stopped and got some flowers so pretty And a bottle of wine to spend some time with his sweetie Gets home, sees a car in the yard and he's thinkin' hmmm? Walks up the driveway opens the door and goes numb Just about the time he's gonna yell "honey I'm home" A trail of clothes down the hall leading to passionate moans Changed his tone, tip-toed to the gun cabinet Grabbed a gun his daddy gave him that he used in Vietnam Walk down the hall kicked in the door said "surprise" Sat down on the bed with guns and roses and wine
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Hubby said "how you two love birds doing? You havin' fun? Don't cover up your nakedness now, What's done's done" He made his wife call her parents Made the dude call his wife and daughter And told them to come over, "let's talk about life" And then hubby called the preacher 'cause you want God involved When the victim of infidelity has got a revolver and the guests straggled into the room one at a time Realizing what was happening and then wishing they were blind He told the preacher who had married them back in the day That he was right 'the lord works in mysterious ways' Then he addressed the room waving the gun carefree Saying "ladies and gentlemen you've been called here to see Two naked embarrassed humans in a bed that I bought They were havin' great sex about the time they got caught" Then he laid the gun down on the bed so relaxed And said "I'm leaving' feel free to shoot me in the back"
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
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Spoiler: click to toggle Name: Jeremy Harris Gender:  Age: 28 Inventory 3x Poke balls  1x Poketech 1x guitar 1x violin Pokémon on Team Chatot Level 5 | ( Leo ) Peck, Growl  0/5
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Apr 19 2009, 07:45 PM
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Okay.
1. So your grammar is not very good. Your sentences are still a bit choppy, but you manage to express yourself pretty well. Try to use more compound sentences and also just watch your grammar. "Because of him finally learning German sixth grade was his best year." That is one of your sentences. It should be more like "Because he finally learned German in sixth grade, he did exponentially better that year; in fact, it was such a great year that he skipped right over seventh grade, ending up in eighth grade the next fall." That sentence of mine is more descriptive and less confusing. Also, it follows a lot of grammatical rules. So just run through your whole bio and fix it up a bit more. Also watch the capitalization. The names of languages (like German) Pokemon, and Pokemon names should all always be capitalized.
2. Secondly, I'm confused as to how this kid could have seen his first Pokemon in ninth grade. This might just be me being picky, but I always felt that Pokemon were as common as dogs, cats, and insects. They're everywhere. Also, the fact that the boy's father knew exactly what Pokemon he had seen is also kinda strange.
So yeah. That's a lot of stuff and well, you don't have to take my advice. But, I dropped in here just for the hell of it and thought I'd help you out.
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Apr 19 2009, 07:55 PM
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Okay, I fixed it up a bit and what you were saying about the first pokemon encounter and his father knowing it right off. 1. He lived in an area where a pokemon sighting was scarcely encountered. And 2. He Sketched :P
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Spoiler: click to toggle [Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Now he was just your average everyday traffic jam competitor With half a gram, walkin' in the club tryin' to set it off She had two silicon weapons of mass distraction Nipples like screw-in cleats, damn near blastin' Through her skin tight blouse, she lookin' for some action Said her hubby was out of town and started askin' If he'd like to go to her house. I think that's when he realized he couldn't do it Looked at her finger, a diamond from her ring Hit his eye, he couldn't linger He started feelin' guilty for everything they were up to He took a deep breath said, "you know what, I'd love to But evidently there is already someone who loves you" She looked at him like he insulted her and said, "*&^% you Look at your pupils, I know what that stuff do Mr. Goody Twoshoes, Call me out, I'll call you out too." Now he was weak as her, he had a ring too.
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Together in their deceitful ways embracing the lust They got carried away like a dog chasin' a bus They were back at her house in another man's bed And gettin 'freaky deaky' while the husband sped home To see his wife cause his job had got done early Meanwhile they're wreckin' the room And talkin' all dirty, and sweaty The hubby stopped and got some flowers so pretty And a bottle of wine to spend some time with his sweetie Gets home, sees a car in the yard and he's thinkin' hmmm? Walks up the driveway opens the door and goes numb Just about the time he's gonna yell "honey I'm home" A trail of clothes down the hall leading to passionate moans Changed his tone, tip-toed to the gun cabinet Grabbed a gun his daddy gave him that he used in Vietnam Walk down the hall kicked in the door said "surprise" Sat down on the bed with guns and roses and wine
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Hubby said "how you two love birds doing? You havin' fun? Don't cover up your nakedness now, What's done's done" He made his wife call her parents Made the dude call his wife and daughter And told them to come over, "let's talk about life" And then hubby called the preacher 'cause you want God involved When the victim of infidelity has got a revolver and the guests straggled into the room one at a time Realizing what was happening and then wishing they were blind He told the preacher who had married them back in the day That he was right 'the lord works in mysterious ways' Then he addressed the room waving the gun carefree Saying "ladies and gentlemen you've been called here to see Two naked embarrassed humans in a bed that I bought They were havin' great sex about the time they got caught" Then he laid the gun down on the bed so relaxed And said "I'm leaving' feel free to shoot me in the back"
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
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Apr 19 2009, 08:09 PM
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oooookay there we go much better to me!
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Lyrics to a meaningful song
Spoiler: click to toggle [Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Now he was just your average everyday traffic jam competitor With half a gram, walkin' in the club tryin' to set it off She had two silicon weapons of mass distraction Nipples like screw-in cleats, damn near blastin' Through her skin tight blouse, she lookin' for some action Said her hubby was out of town and started askin' If he'd like to go to her house. I think that's when he realized he couldn't do it Looked at her finger, a diamond from her ring Hit his eye, he couldn't linger He started feelin' guilty for everything they were up to He took a deep breath said, "you know what, I'd love to But evidently there is already someone who loves you" She looked at him like he insulted her and said, "*&^% you Look at your pupils, I know what that stuff do Mr. Goody Twoshoes, Call me out, I'll call you out too." Now he was weak as her, he had a ring too.
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Together in their deceitful ways embracing the lust They got carried away like a dog chasin' a bus They were back at her house in another man's bed And gettin 'freaky deaky' while the husband sped home To see his wife cause his job had got done early Meanwhile they're wreckin' the room And talkin' all dirty, and sweaty The hubby stopped and got some flowers so pretty And a bottle of wine to spend some time with his sweetie Gets home, sees a car in the yard and he's thinkin' hmmm? Walks up the driveway opens the door and goes numb Just about the time he's gonna yell "honey I'm home" A trail of clothes down the hall leading to passionate moans Changed his tone, tip-toed to the gun cabinet Grabbed a gun his daddy gave him that he used in Vietnam Walk down the hall kicked in the door said "surprise" Sat down on the bed with guns and roses and wine
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Hubby said "how you two love birds doing? You havin' fun? Don't cover up your nakedness now, What's done's done" He made his wife call her parents Made the dude call his wife and daughter And told them to come over, "let's talk about life" And then hubby called the preacher 'cause you want God involved When the victim of infidelity has got a revolver and the guests straggled into the room one at a time Realizing what was happening and then wishing they were blind He told the preacher who had married them back in the day That he was right 'the lord works in mysterious ways' Then he addressed the room waving the gun carefree Saying "ladies and gentlemen you've been called here to see Two naked embarrassed humans in a bed that I bought They were havin' great sex about the time they got caught" Then he laid the gun down on the bed so relaxed And said "I'm leaving' feel free to shoot me in the back"
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Journey & Profile
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Roses are Red
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Apr 21 2009, 04:58 PM
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Apr 21 2009, 04:59 PM
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Lyrics to a meaningful song
Spoiler: click to toggle [Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Now he was just your average everyday traffic jam competitor With half a gram, walkin' in the club tryin' to set it off She had two silicon weapons of mass distraction Nipples like screw-in cleats, damn near blastin' Through her skin tight blouse, she lookin' for some action Said her hubby was out of town and started askin' If he'd like to go to her house. I think that's when he realized he couldn't do it Looked at her finger, a diamond from her ring Hit his eye, he couldn't linger He started feelin' guilty for everything they were up to He took a deep breath said, "you know what, I'd love to But evidently there is already someone who loves you" She looked at him like he insulted her and said, "*&^% you Look at your pupils, I know what that stuff do Mr. Goody Twoshoes, Call me out, I'll call you out too." Now he was weak as her, he had a ring too.
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Together in their deceitful ways embracing the lust They got carried away like a dog chasin' a bus They were back at her house in another man's bed And gettin 'freaky deaky' while the husband sped home To see his wife cause his job had got done early Meanwhile they're wreckin' the room And talkin' all dirty, and sweaty The hubby stopped and got some flowers so pretty And a bottle of wine to spend some time with his sweetie Gets home, sees a car in the yard and he's thinkin' hmmm? Walks up the driveway opens the door and goes numb Just about the time he's gonna yell "honey I'm home" A trail of clothes down the hall leading to passionate moans Changed his tone, tip-toed to the gun cabinet Grabbed a gun his daddy gave him that he used in Vietnam Walk down the hall kicked in the door said "surprise" Sat down on the bed with guns and roses and wine
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Hubby said "how you two love birds doing? You havin' fun? Don't cover up your nakedness now, What's done's done" He made his wife call her parents Made the dude call his wife and daughter And told them to come over, "let's talk about life" And then hubby called the preacher 'cause you want God involved When the victim of infidelity has got a revolver and the guests straggled into the room one at a time Realizing what was happening and then wishing they were blind He told the preacher who had married them back in the day That he was right 'the lord works in mysterious ways' Then he addressed the room waving the gun carefree Saying "ladies and gentlemen you've been called here to see Two naked embarrassed humans in a bed that I bought They were havin' great sex about the time they got caught" Then he laid the gun down on the bed so relaxed And said "I'm leaving' feel free to shoot me in the back"
[Hook:] Just walk away, just walk away There's too much wrong for you to stay Just walk away, Just walk away Gonna get yourself in trouble, walk away
Journey & Profile
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Trainer Information
Spoiler: click to toggle Name: Jeremy Harris Gender:  Age: 28 Inventory 3x Poke balls  1x Poketech 1x guitar 1x violin Pokémon on Team Chatot Level 5 | ( Leo ) Peck, Growl  0/5
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