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| Tari; -The REAL submission- | |
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| Topic Started: Apr 15 2009, 02:33 AM (221 Views) | |
| Kat | Apr 15 2009, 02:33 AM Post #1 |
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Pokemon Species: ![]() Nickname: Tari Age: 2 years Gender: ![]() Differences: Her tail is almost half the size of others', but her claws and feathers are also noticeably cleaner to professional. History: Tari had almost the perfect life. She had a lot of friends, her dad, mom, sister, and her always got together. They always had a abundance of food, and never had any troubles either. But, her family was still a bit...weird. The strange thing about her family is that her dad is a Dudrio, while her mom is....you guessed it, a Taillow. Tari doesn't know what happened, but she knows it happened. How does she know it happened? Well.....She's alive, ain't she? Her sister, a Duduo, was a pretty bit younger then her. A little less then a year. Still, all good things came to an end, and a fire killed everyone. She's not sure about her sister, but she's certain her parents are dead. She was taken in by a family of Pikachus. They were nice, and a pretty good family to her too. But, it just wasn't the same. Finally, she decided to go on her own journey. Her goals? To start her own life, get strong, live successful, and see if her sister is truly dead. This is everything this girl wants, and the fiery determination to get it ain't going to stop her none! Personality: Tari is really cheerful. She tends to be a little clumsy, but is very friendly. She's often the kind that would make a great mother, to be honest. She's cute, but very dense and maybe a little....how do you say.....weird? She takes no interest in someone's appearance, though she will say someone is beautiful, or pretty, but she will never hold ugliness against him. Still, when she's angry, she'll literally tell someone off with a sweet smile, which was often called the smile of 'doom' by her friends. Still, she's polite, and respectful towards her elders, something not completely common nowadays. Trouble literally finds her. Countless times, she has almost killed herself because of the most strangest reasons. She's also very interested in sports, loving to work hard towards what she wants. However, she can't stay in one place too long or she'll get all lazy, the opposite of her usual nature. She also finds the contests humans compete in interesting, often looking in to watch the pokemon dazzle beautifully. Egg Move: Rage Known Attacks: Peck, Growl, Focus Energy Starting Area: Forest of Legends Edited by Kat, Apr 20 2009, 02:36 PM.
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| Roses are Red | Apr 15 2009, 03:15 PM Post #2 |
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I'm assuming this is a second account for Kathy since I moved the other submission. First off, I'm not sure how many paragraphs you need for a second account Pokemon but it would definitely be at least 4 for history and 2 for personality since that's what you need to make a regular one. So...yeah, it needs editing. I'll check with an Admin tonight on that and on your color difference. |
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| Kathy | Apr 15 2009, 06:53 PM Post #3 |
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Just realized its 5 for history and...I think 3 or 4 on personality. *forgot, but checked earlier* Edit: I keep posting in the wrong account >.> But, i'm going to edit it right now. Edited by Kathy, Apr 15 2009, 06:54 PM.
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| Kat | Apr 15 2009, 07:58 PM Post #4 |
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How's that? |
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| Roses are Red | Apr 15 2009, 08:23 PM Post #5 |
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Er, 4 paragraphs means 4 paragraphs with at least 4 sentences each. So, some of your paragraphs need to be beefed up. And I still need Shad to see if there's anything extra needed for Pokemon second account players. |
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| Kat | Apr 15 2009, 08:58 PM Post #6 |
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>.<; Sowwie. I fixed it. There's, like, 2 paragraphs that are short of a sentence, but I tried to make it up by making the next paragraph a bit bigger.... |
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| Roku Hannya | Apr 18 2009, 06:45 PM Post #7 |
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Nyancat Awaaaay!
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| Kat | Apr 20 2009, 12:26 AM Post #8 |
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Starr is grounded...Can I hold the Taillow for a bit?? I'm on the PSP, so editing it would be too hard... Can't post on cbox either... Edit: Nvm. Got on the comp while dad was away. We got home just in time. ^o^ Anyways, how is this? Edited by Kat, Apr 20 2009, 02:37 PM.
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| Roses are Red | Apr 22 2009, 10:27 PM Post #9 |
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Approved! Your Profile and Journey will be up in no time! |
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Silence is merely another language. The cry before | The lull during | The silence after Kayla's Pack Wish List GPXPlus
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