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| Topic Started: Mar 11 2009, 10:29 PM (47 Views) | ||
| Eevachu | Mar 11 2009, 10:29 PM Post #1 | |
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Overlord of Trains - GRUNTY GRUNTY GRUNTY GRUNTY
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Character Template Name: Rika Devlin Age: 15 Gender: Male Profesion: Pokemon Trainer Appearance: ![]() History: Rika was born in Lavendar Town of the Kanto Reigon. While his life isn't super exciting millions of things happen, still, he's had so and so here and there and whatnot. He was raised by his mother Melissa, and his father Bob. Rika has a brother, James. Around Eight Years old, it was a big Pokemon Tournament. A person, around 18, stood on a trainer podium. Across from him was another person around 18 or so too. It was Kanto's Championships, or the Pokemon League. The final match to be specific. One of the people was a trainer named Greg, and the other, Rika's brother James. The battle had already started. Six on six Match. Greg had sent out four pokemon already, including a Charmander, Feraligatr, Roselia, and Pichu. The Charmander and Pichu had fainted, the Roselia was frozen, and the Feraligatr was currently out. James only had sent two, a fainted Tauros, and an Empoleon. The stage was actually a giant lake stage. Empoleon shot off like a Jet, because it was using Jet Stream. Slamming straight into Feraligatr, it was sent flying. Feraligatr landed in the water, swimming to the top. It fired multiple Hydro Pumps, missing Empoleon. After another Hydro Pump missed, it fired a Hyper Beam. The beam zoomed through the air, missing Empoleon. It slammed straight into James, however. He got multiple burns, but that wasn't the worst as he was sent flying. A search party rushed to the scene, but no body was ever found. It seemed that the other trainer won, but turned it down on account of causing the other trainer's supposed death. Espically since James was winning against Greg. Rika grew up a couple years, but decided to, despite that it caused his own brothers death, become a trainer of his own. However, not in Kanto or Johto. He took a boat to a town... A town called Millenia Town. Starting Pokemon: ![]() Nickname: Dutchess Starting Town: Millenia Town Poketech Color: Gold Other: N/A Edited by Eevachu, Mar 11 2009, 10:45 PM.
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| Roses are Red | Mar 11 2009, 10:39 PM Post #2 | |
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I am sorry but I cannot accept this profiler for this issue: - Spelling/grammar issues There's a lot of odd capitalization problems. A word should only be capitalized if it is a proper noun or the beginning of a sentence. For example: Six on Six Match. Should be: Six on six match. Also, Feraligatr is spelled without an 'o' because of the ten character limit so it's spelled that way here too. When naming something possessive (trainers suppossed death should be trainer's supposed death). Please fix these errors and post back in this topic when you are finished. Thank you! |
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| Eevachu | Mar 11 2009, 10:48 PM Post #3 | |
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I saw what you mean, the capitalization was in there a lot. I think I got all, or most of it at least. So I guess I'm finished. | |
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| Roses are Red | Mar 12 2009, 08:57 AM Post #4 | |
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Approved! Your Profile and Journey will be up in no time. | |
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