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A free land
Topic Started: Feb 2 2008, 09:01 AM (174 Views)
The Savage
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A free land
From sand to sand
To quench a killers lust
Worthy of a bust
An addicts dream
Nothing's as it seems
But what is this land?
Not merely sand
But a place
A place of simple disgrace
Tainted by every face
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Lucie

Great poem there are just two things that I think are a little off on it.

1. A place of simple disgrace

Try leaving out A place since you already have it in the line before.

2. It has an uneven number of lines.
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