A free land

A free land
Topic Started: Feb 2 2008, 09:01 AM (60 Views)
The Savage	Feb 2 2008, 09:01 AM Post #1
Administrator Posts: 21 Group: Admins Member #1 Joined: Jan 31, 2008	A free land From sand to sand To quench a killers lust Worthy of a bust An addicts dream Nothing's as it seems But what is this land? Not merely sand But a place A place of simple disgrace Tainted by every face



Lucie	Feb 4 2008, 10:40 AM Post #2
Posts: 8 Group: Members Member #3 Joined: Feb 3, 2008	Great poem there are just two things that I think are a little off on it. 1. A place of simple disgrace Try leaving out A place since you already have it in the line before. 2. It has an uneven number of lines.
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