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| The Savage | Feb 2 2008, 08:58 AM Post #1 |
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i walked into the darkened room the sink to the right, the bath tub dead ahead, dead ahead indeed sweat poured like a pitcher from my nervous palms, soon i thought; soon my wrists will pour like a pitcher i felt the steps coming for me... "i must die" i yelled my mother banged on the door, it seamed as if the hinges would snap; but i did not care. why should i care? i reached for my escape my trip to the burning pits of the beast my hands touched its cool blade, they then bled. i the site of blood maid me happy My mothers pounding persisted she yelped "i love you son, i love you oh so much" i cried "i will die today, i will set things right mother" I love you mom, i screamed, its the only way, there is no other way to end my suffering blood filled my throat from my screaming i tried to yell, the vain gushed, i chocked on my own liquids, spewing from my throat i was dieing slowly, not physically, emotionally i put it to my wrist pressed it in red spilt my life drained i moved it to the right blood gushed , my life pured out of me my mother was a screaming wreck i screamed with a bloody tongue, "I love you mom, it's over" "... its over i did it" whispered i as realisation hit i placed my wrist to my mouth and bit chunks a flesh littered my tongue now joy was felt at the depths of my being free at last, the end has come... |
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| Lucie | Feb 4 2008, 10:46 AM Post #2 |
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All I can say is WOW! That seemed so real. Great job 1. i the site of blood maid me happy made 2. i the site of blood maid me happy Just a suggestion: The site of the blood made me happy |
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| The Savage | Feb 6 2008, 04:32 PM Post #3 |
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You thought it was good? Thanks |
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| Lucie | Feb 8 2008, 08:56 AM Post #4 |
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I enjoy the way you write. You make it where the audience can feel and see what you are writing about. That takes a lot of work to do. Yes it is good. Your very Welcome. If you would prefer me not to correct you let me know and I will stop. It is a bad habit of mine. Sorry! |
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| The Savage | Feb 8 2008, 09:43 AM Post #5 |
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Please correct me, I need all of the help i can get... |
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