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Nomad Le Deon; MSR-72 Sniper Rifle Weapon
Topic Started: Dec 13 2011, 12:12 AM (738 Views)
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Character Name: Nomad Le Deon ( Nomad)

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Type: Weapon/ Strategist

Partnered: N/A

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Clothing and description: Nomad stands at 5'11, with a slight tan to his skin. He looks like a normal seventeen year old, he looks a little wild and seems lazy but he is always deep in thought. His blond hair is put up in a spiky haired lazy style that he has grown used to.He wears a black short sleeve T with pink stripes. He wears a baby blue zipper pull over with a black skull on it that he got for his fifteenth birthday from a friend and never takes it off.His eyes are like looking in to the ocean on a sunny day, it's soft blue when he is kind and dark and mysterious when he is angered. When some one looks at Nomads face he looks tired or bored of his environment. He is usually seen playing with the two black wristbands on his arms with pink skulls when he is thinking of a solution to a problem.

Nomads weapon form is a MSR-72 sniper rifle it is magazine feed and is Semi-automatic.It combines lethal accuracy at 300 meters with a user adjustable folding stock, free-float handguard. Nomad form of the MSR-72 sniper rifle is mission-adaptable, efficient design and optimal material selection for performance and corrosion resistance. In this form his meister never has to leaver the battlefield.



History: Nomad grew up in an abusive household. His family either didn't care about other than feeding him or ignored him because he was born as a weapon. He was made to do all the house work and was a practice dummy for his brothers to learn how to fight. The only one that cared about him was his older sister, the eldest child. By the time he was seven years old, his sister moved out, unable to live in the household anymore. She left with a promise to come back for Nomad when she had a solid living situation. When his sister left he became a target of anger from his family where his normal beatings became just child's play. It wasn't until he finally snapping out in his own anger that he became aware of his own power. His arm had become a long barrel of a weapon he did not reorganize, but it didn't matter to him what it was so he used it to kill the oldest of his brothers in cold blood in a ally. When he got home he had decided to keep the incident a secret afraid they might kill him for his actions. He knew one thing and that was to keep his secret hidden to every one even his sister.

When Nomad was the age of fourteen his sister came and got him from his family home. He spent one year with his sister before she was killed by a unknown monster. Nomad became enraged and became a hunter of super-natural creatures. The more he fought alone the more he became aware he was slipping from the sanity with each kill. His face once happy with his sister in every form became a emotionless art of boredom and sorrow. He used his abilities to track down the kishin eggs and kill them where ever he showed up at.The killings continued until the age of fifteen when a meister and a weapon crossed paths with him and seen his weapon abilities. There had been a rumor floating around that a unknown weapon had gone roaming the world fighting any non-human he came in to contact with. They had caught him fighting alone against a kishin egg with out the help of a meister. They watched in the shadows as he fought with no expression or words being exchanged between him and the kishin. They apprehended him after a fight and tried asking him questions, but he never answered them with words but shaking his head in yes's and no's. It wasn't long until the talked him in to joining the DWMA. He spent the next two years going to school and working for the DWMA.

Personality: Nomad is can be seen as a silent type with not much to state. He is usually seen with a book in his face reading books about emotions. When he does speak he has a firm but soft voice as it is rarely used. Once he speaks to some one he trusts the person completely and would never steer them wrong. Nomad has no idea how to respond to true emotions, but only logic after his experience with his sister. He can be useful in a combat situation from a distance relaying to his meister on battle strategy. When asked about his sister he looks away and starts ignoring the individual. Nomad's experience of losing his sister greatly impacted him to never get close to people or else he would get hurt again. This prompted his fear of people and how if he became attached to them he undoubtedly would lead to their deaths. Inside his heart he feels as if he is crying and no one has the ability to free him of his fears.

When Nomad is troubled by a subject he plays with his wrist bands and acts as if he is in a deep thought process. When he does show some type of emotion it is usually subjected by his hand movements. When he is sad he interlocks his hands and stares down at the ground. He can be confused at times and taps his thumbs to each of his fingers starting with his index finger and ending with his pinky and then back to his index finger. When he is happy he shows a thumbs up to the person or holds up only the index finger and middle finger in a peace symbol. Nomad does get angry at times and when this happens he clenches his right hand and deeply stares at the person as if he is piercing their soul.

Abilities: Weapon Transformation
Technique Name: Full transformation.
Effects/Description: Nomad takes on the form of a MSR-72 sniper rifle. His ammunition is powered by the combined spiritual powers of him and his miester, but he can use the rounds by sacrificing portions of his soul. The weapon transformation takes on a re-loadable magazine that takes twelve seconds to reload. The magazine has only six round in it to be used until a new reload is initiated. The weapon it's self can fire at a long range and can hit a target at 300 meters. The weapon is most effective when the scope is aimed at the head of a kishin is visible. Like most sniper rifles it can shoot through a object of organic tissue. If the head is not visible the rounds used by the meister can very well blow a arm or leg off if the meister fires at a ligament,knee cap or elbow. The weapon it's self can take on multiple opponents, but the rounds wouldn't do much against them as it has only six rounds to take down just one kishin egg.

Nomad is able to be used by any meister. Rather than being too heavy or burning someone's hands, when the meister and Nomad are incompatible Nomad is unable to effectively balance the mixture of wavelength between himself and his meister. If the meister is too weak, then Nomad falls prey to the same rules as if he was fighting by himself. If the meister is too powerful then the recoil of the first shot would blow Nomad out of his weapon form causing internal bleeding and also leave him laying on the ground passed out in a critical state.


Technique Name: Partial Transform
Effects/Description: Barrel Cannon, Nomads arm turns in to the barrel of the MSR-72 and fire a single round ever 12 seconds. (compensating for bolt action style shots)This attack is a close range attack and if attempted at a mid range or longer range the shot will undoubtedly not do any damage.
Combat Style: Close range.When Nomad fires in this form it has a weaker effect then with his meister with him. The round is as only as strong as a pistol and over time can cause nomad to pass out over the amount of strain it has on his spiritual wavelength. When Nomad fire all twelve shots he very well will pass out as he has used to much spiritual energy to move around on his own or stay awake. It can also take him a day to three days to wake up from that big of a strain on his body to fully recover his spiritual wavelength back to normal. When he waked up from recovery he will be tires, slow and a little nauseated from the ordeal and he will have to take a few more days to recover from this incident.


Combat Style: Nomad is a strategist, and is seen as a support,assassinations and influence. When he is seen in support he is far away from the battlefield firing rounds in to a kishin egg causing them to be distracted for moments so his comrades can deliver a deadly blow. There is always a dark side to each person. Nomads dark side if of assassinations of kishin eggs from a distance. He can wait up to days for his target to get in to perfect sighting before firing a round in to it. There is also his desired tactic, and that is of influence of direction the kishin egg will head towards. This allows him to control the environment and situation he can place the kishin egg in.

Miscellaneous Information: Is afraid of human interaction with others he doesn't know.

Strengths: Very powerful long range fighter
Can scout areas with telescopic vision in full weapon transformation.
Weapon is can be adaptable for any means of missions.

Weaknesses:
  • Not a strong weapon for close encounters.
  • Recoil can make the round to miss the target.
  • Partial transformation when used can knock Nomad out for up to three days if all twelve shots have been fired.
  • Weak against multiple opponents
  • Nomad is able to be used by any meister. Rather than being too heavy or burning someone's hands, when the meister and Nomad are incompatible Nomad is unable to effectively balance the mixture of wavelength between himself and his meister. If the meister is too weak, then Nomad falls prey to the same rules as if he was fighting by himself. If the meister is too powerful then the recoil of the first shot would blow Nomad out of his weapon form causing internal bleeding and also leave him laying on the ground passed out in a critical state.






    Roleplay Sample:

    It was a sunny day in town, and every one seemed busy so they could take the rest of the day off and enjoy it. There was however one person sitting in the shade looking down in life. Nomad had finished his recent novels of how to a better person, and seemed to be lacking in the idea of fun factor. He had been on a break from missions lately, and knew it wasn't healthy taking a job after job. His meister had gone to do their own thing for the day and had left him to his own mechanism which he had none with out a book to read.

    He spent half the day walking around the town staring at couples or small children playing in ally ways. He just didn't get how to use his emotions any more since his sister had died by a creature. Since he joined the DWMA he seemed to avoid human interactions with unknown people. It wasn't because he didn't want friends he just didn't know hot to interact with them. He feared that if they knew he had no emotions they wouldn't except him and he would be shunned from even his meister.

    The day continued and he kept watching people from afar making mental notes on how they act. He just couldn't understand how they could continue being happy even with the knowledge of monsters attacking innocents all around the world. He couldn't take watching them any more and headed back to the DWMA where he would isolate him self in the library. It wasn't a far walk but it did seem a trivial task with all the twist and turns the school had to offer. The idea or concept of how this elaborate scheme of construction on the school was slightly wacky. He made it to the library and decided it was best to find a documentary about Excalibur and see what it had to say about the weapon.He just felt like a pupil these days to almost every one he had encountered in the DWMA, and this bothered him slightly.[/font]

    Shini Edit: [29/12/11] http://s1.zetaboards.com/42_42_564/topic/4632350/1/#new
    Edited by Shinigami, Dec 29 2011, 01:39 AM.
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I am a quiet tornado on a pond...
Shunned from the plains of pride...
Watered by clouds of sorrow...
I am the Nomad...

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Hi there Dot! It's me, Imp! I'll be giving your profile a look over before it gets accepted~! So far this is a good profile, and I can see you've really put some thought into your character ^__^ It would be great if you could give us some more details, though, so we can know more about Nomad :3 Don't be daunted if it seems like I am asking a lot, it's only because I am so intrigued by your character and want to know more! ^__^


Description

This is a great description. It's good to have a clear idea of what Nomad looks like ^__^ please move his weapon abilities (such as range) into the ability section, preferably under his 'full transformation' description~ Just to make sure we have all the ability details in the one place :3

History

So far the history is interesting, and it has really piqued my interest! I would love to know more about how your character grew up :3 This is the part that is really important in your profile, because it is where you tie all of the other parts into a cohesive character. This is where you justify personality quirks, talk about how they learned special powers, what motivates them, and what goals they have for the future. A good history can set a good character profile apart from a great one, and helps you understand your character better :3 It's a good place to make your character unique too~

Make sure that your history covers all the basics like, how did they find out about all their powers, What was their childhood like, and how did it influence Nomad's personality ^__^

Personality

This is a great snapshot of the personality, but I was hoping you could flesh it out a little :3 You obviously have a good idea of what your character is like, but it just isn't as clearly defined here as it could be ^__^ Don't forget that not everyone expresses emotions in the same way, and even if someone is 'emotionless' they can still have triggers that set them off (for example what would Nomad feel like if he saw a child being abused by their parents like he was, or if someone insulted the memory of his sister?). Make sure you tell us what makes your character angry, happy and sad, (what their triggers are) or alternatively how they deal with emotions in the most logical way (how would Nomad try to comfort someone? Etc)

Misc

You mention Nomad is afraid of interacting with strangers, maybe you could put this in his personality and/or justify it in is history a little.

Strengths and weaknesses

you say Nomad can “Can form a suppressor for maximum killing.” What does this mean? Is it an ability? If so, please add it to abilities.

Overall

This is a great character, and I really look forward to seeing it fleshed out a little~ I think with a little love and care it could be a really fantastic character :3 I really can't wait to read more about Nomad! ^__^ Well done~
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I am a quiet tornado on a pond...
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Watered by clouds of sorrow...
I am the Nomad...

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Hi Dot ^^ sorry this is taking so long! I will try to be quicker on my modding from now on, so let's get down to it.

First of all, you've done a great job fleshing out this application. I can really see the character coming to life here, especially in the personality section. Well done~

Abilities

Full weapon transformation – how far away does he have to be for that kind of power (punch through 3 inches of steel)?

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Max range (point): 3100 meters- Max range point refers to to the actual distance seen through the scope with out any modifications to the weapon. It's like looking through iron sights of a M16, M4 carbine, 249 and a 240B. The rifle doesn't naturally have iron sights and in creation is always outfitted with a stock scope. This means that using the stock scope would only put you at max range point of 3100 meters of a target.

Max Range (area) 5200 meters- Max range area refers to the surrounding area in a 360 view. The area based around the rifle can help adjust the rate of meters for the rifle. Like if your on a large hill that had four plains surrounding it. The high ground would allow the bullet to travel a extended amount of feet by taking in the height and velocity of winds.

Max range( mechanical) 8400 meters- Max range Mechanical refers to the adaption of the weapon. The weapon can be modified to increase range but extending the barrel and adding a variable scope or help reduce the kick and sway by using a bi-pod.


Please get rid of this and use layman terms. Just tell us 'You can see ??? meters through the scope, but it is possible to shoot up to ??? meters in favourable conditions.”

Please choose one partial transformation only, and delete the other one. Once Nomad has been on a few missions he can learn it later, to grow more powerful ^__^ the same thing goes for “Technique Name: Weapon transformation addition.” - your weapon form for Nomad is already over powered, and any additions onto that need to go so we can create a more balanced character ^__^

Combat Style

Is missing? Could you please add this section in, it is where we learn how good a fighter your character is, and whether they know any fighting style or martial arts.

Strengths and weaknesses

The weakness that if the person is not using the scope they cannot see through it, should be cut out, please, unless it is difficult to actually use the scope, in which case, please change it to 'the scope is difficult to use because...'
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Ok let's get down to the difficult part of the modding. Before we start, I want to take the time to explain myself, because it's always important that you can see why I am asking for particular mods ^__^ that way we can understand each other better.

You have made Nomad's weapon form extremely true to a real rifle model, and while that is generally ok, this isn't a super realistic RP. Soul Eater (as a theme) is action packed, and enjoys the fact that it is a cartoon and can bend the laws of reality, rather than having realistic military style stakeouts for days on end, or campaigns with military tactics, even though Soul Eater is fundamentally a military force. Due to this I am going to ask you to modify your weapon capabilities to make sure the character is balanced, but also to make sure you can happily engage in RP with other people on the site who are in the midst of a Soul Eater themed RP.

First of all I want you to limit your range (the range from which Nomad can shoot and injure a target). The most we have given to anyone this far is 2 kilometres (which is just over one mile) and that was with a lot of drawbacks. For a sniper rifle who is content to never come into contact with the target I would advise a significantly shorter distance (such as Kashira's 300 meters).

Second – please explain how Nomad can shoot in partial if his ammunition is “powered by the combined spiritual powers of him and his miester”

I know these are big mods so I will leave it at that for now. If you really can't stand to reduce your range then you may have to reduce your accuracy or the power of your bullets. If you want to justify the gun being less than a real rifle of the same model, then you could always cite the fact that a) Nomad hasn't had training as a weapon at Shibusen (they train students how to better control their weapon form) or say that he needs more souls and experience to reach his full potential (in later training threads you could extend his range again :3)
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I am the Nomad...

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Hey Dot ^__^ I can see you thought of an interesting weakness for Nomad - am I right in assuming that he has to use up a fraction of his soul in each of his shots?

It would be great if you could explain what effect that has on him. Does he slowly become more and more corrupted, or weaker? Do the shards of his soul grow back (essentially he can heal his soul in-between missions)? If the shards don't grow back, how long will it be until he 'dies'? It's a very interesting weakness ^__^ but just now we need to decide what it does in-character~
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I went with a lesser attack with the rounds and a weakness for using it.

Got some help from LK for the weakness he undergoes using the ability.
Edited by Nomad, Dec 20 2011, 05:12 AM.
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Shunned from the plains of pride...
Watered by clouds of sorrow...
I am the Nomad...

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Ok sorry it has been a little while between mods. Let's get through a few points this time ok ^__^

Abilities

Full Transformation – how powerful is the shot? Is it enough to kill a kishin-egg with one hit? Enough to kill multiple kishin eggs?

Weakness – there are not enough weaknesses at the moment to justify a range of 1500 meters, please give him a range of 300 meters or figure out an appropriate weakness.

Partial transformation – please limit this to close range only. You can fire a little faster if you like. Also please give us a rough estimate of how many shots he has before he 'passes out'

Strengths/weaknesses

Please could you edit these to reflect the changes to Nomad's abilities. Also do you think 'not a close range weapon' is still appropriate given Nomad's partial is a close range battle option?
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