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| Saito Minamoto | Aug 4 2011, 06:45 PM Post #1 |
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Terms you might need to know: bokuto, suburito, and iaito Bokutos are wooden swords, suburitos are bigger wooden swords, and iaitos are blunt katanas Character Name: Saito Minamoto Age:17 Gender:Male Type:Meister Partnered? No Image: Clothing and description: Anyone who have met Saito for the first time will notice he's your usual average guy underneath his skill, despite his blue-grayish hair which may make some people feel curious. It takes on a more shaggy style where most of his hair is matted down and is a little bit short up to the back of his neck. His face looks rather childish to most people, but his eyes show some restraint and a little mature light in them. In combat, his face becomes dark and tense under the pressure of possible death. For his age, he is a little shorter than his peers which makes most people think he would be your average weakling. However, his training in the Tenshin Muto Style has him strengthen his lower body area for more speed and increase in attacking power. Thus, his legs are slightly developed for speed and to generate power to make up for his lack of muscle in the upper body area. But despite that he has less muscle there, his forearms are also slightly developed as a result of swinging suburitos, bokutos, and iaito (blunt katanas) for practicing his style. His body is full of scars from combat experience against thugs, yakuzas, and real martial artists like him. The rough calluses on his hands and feet are a result of swinging the sword and rough erratic footwork for thirteen long years of his training. For clothing he usually wears a full set indigo hakama. Though, it would be more correct that the top part is indigo and the bottom is a very dark blue compared to the hue. He does wear sneakers, but the soles are thinner than normal so that he could fully utilize his footwork more easily. At the left side of his hips, he usually has a full daisho pair of a katana and a wakizashi. When it comes to practice, he brings along only bokutos, the blunt iaitos, or just a single suburito. But when it comes for real combat, he brings a full battle-ready combat katana which was passed down from his master. When it comes for very hot days, he usually just wears a black t-shirt which is tight upon his chest and a cargo shorts for the sake of relieving himself from the heat and also more mobility. Which also brings into mind that he wears normal white slippers instead of his usual sneakers. When it comes to formal wear, he has a separate full white hakama for the special days. Usually for pajamas, Saito just goes to bed wearing only a tank-top and a pair of boxers as it feels much more comfortable and more mobile than compared to the other articles of clothing. History: Saito's parents were originally members of the DWMA. Just members wouldn't be enough to describe them. In fact, they were widely feared by many eggs of Kishin and witches in most of Asia. However, because of this, his parents were attacked by witches just when he was born. Unfortunately, they succeeded in killing them despite the two members had the help of their old swordsmanship mentor in the hospital. The battle was a horrifying bloodbath. Many innocent people got involved in the cross-fire as a number of witches were slaughtered brutally. Thankfully, Saito was safe and was entrusted to the old man (the mentor) to raise and train him for the future and his own happiness. As a child, Saito suffered envy of other children also having parents who show their love for them. Thus this made him cherish his master as a father figure and as a role model. Though... He has anything, but real morals. But despite that, his master did take good care of him and teach him the philosophies behind the style. His master is Kawasaki Oizumi, seventy-eight years old, the eighteenth and current soke (Grand Master) of Tenshin Muto Style. He's very well-known as both a swordsman in the DWMA world and in the martial arts world. Much of his experience comes heavily from DWMA as he was once a three-star meister, himself, until he had to retire from old age at seventy. A whole lot of people, including his students have known him to be an uncouth and crazy old man from his mannerisms and the training he dishes out. Many rumors had it that there was a great schism between the students which caused a sort of civil war which led to the deaths of many students. There were two sides of the schism. One side favored the protection of the style and the other craved for power. Eventually the only ones in the first said side were Oizumi, Saito's parents, and Oizumi's main disciple. The second said side had five honor students left, beside the main disciple, who started the great rebellion and disappeared out of nowhere after the civil war. The main disciple also disappeared as well, threatening the passing down of the style. So, it was up to Saito's parents to continue it, and so... Saito was born. At the age of four, he had the boy start learning the Tenshin Muto Style which was passed on years since the fall of Oda Nobunaga. At the beginning of the training, he has shown much talent of the sword like his parents once showed to the master. Years and years passed by as he trained under the tutelage of his master. To date, he was the only student of the style who is on Oizumi's side beside the main disciple. Eventually, when he got into junior high, he tried out kendo and found it enjoyable which also helped on his training. Like any other person, he had a rather enjoyable life style which was peppered with grueling training with his master. At school, he did have several acquaintances and few friends which he cherished like any other person. But, however, he had a run-in with thugs and yakuza from time to time. Mostly because of chance... Most wanted to rob him of his money or just kill him to vent their anger on. Thankfully Saito was able to defeat many of them with his teachings while being lucky at all times that some did not bring guns. When they started doing so, he already was able to defeat them even though thanks to the training, the combat experience from kendo, and street fights. The defeated thugs and yakuzas eventually brought more of their friends in to kill/beat him up to a pulp. And unfortunately for them, they failed to do so as he was too resourceful for them to utilize their power by numbers by thinking up old military strategies against them on the streets. And because of his run-in with the gangs, many people shied away from him because being associated with him is so dangerous. But, despite that, he did have a few true friends who stayed by his side. Soon, as word of his prowess was spread, many real martial artists from other styles challenged him when he was around fifteen, just as he entered high school. Mostly because his master was very well-known in the martial arts world and in DWMA. Thankfully, so far, he was able to defeat many of them thanks to his training and experience. But when it came to overwhelming strong enemies, luck played a very huge role in it. Soon his master bid him to join DWMA and have a feel for the combat that most meisters and demon weapons partake in. But for Saito, it was a way for him to surpass him and his parents and also lay out his vengeance against witches, which is why he joined them. He left Japan with a gomokuroku certificate (certification of expert) in the style. Tenshin Muto Ryu consists heavily with the sword as you can tell from the history above and the appearance. The style itself heavily relies on a humongous amount of bodily control for both speed and power which is trained by sticking acupuncture needles at some parts of the body and striking with those on until they don't feel any pain anymore which means their bodily movement, itself, has become efficient . Besides the sword, some kenpo aspects are also present in the style. These include kicking, grappling, or stabbing in the eye or neck in close range combat. It was created by its founder, Shinnojou Iori, the God of War during the civil war in the Sengoku era. In fact, he was the one who helped Akechi Mitsuhide take down Oda Nobunaga, himself. Personality:If one word could explain his personality, it'd be blunt. Yes. Blunt, and very straightforward to the point people could hate him. He won't lie to you about what he think of you, but he does provide some advice to help people improve whatever. Definitely he does sometimes hold back when he absolutely needs to. One can easily tell that he got his personality majorly from his master's care. It has been shown that he's someone who will respect what people tend to believe in and respect their beliefs as it was also in one of the style's teachings. In combat, his whole point of view is concentrated at the task at hand and never jokes around at all. He rarely shows any mercy as a result of all the teachings of war and the sword his master hammered inside his brain. No matter what happens in combat, he always stays resolute. Though there are very few times when he could be shaken. Very few. One of his pet peeves are thugs and gangsters. He believes a good many of them get people involved with their own petty business of territory and respect. In fact, he looks down on them and believes they're all worth trash. Another pet peeve is the hot weather in DWMA. Sure, he already hated hot weather in Japan, but in Nevada... That's another level to consider. He has shown to have a rather... disdain for witches and their Sway of Magic. Pretty much the same idea as the thugs and gangsters. Saito has been shown to be a huge fan of Nana Mizuki and has a poster picture of her plastered on his room which he proudly displays it. He's also a partial otaku (I'm sure you guys know what that is) which he desperately does his best to hide that fact as he doesn't want people to make fun of his leanings. Though, he's more scared of his master finding out, who tends to be even more annoying than most people he ever knew. Saito is known to be a fanatic for curry and cream cheese. Especially curry bread. He attempts to add curry and cream cheese into all of his meals. When meeting up with new people, he is rather... impartial. Sure, he'll show some manners and so forth... But, to gain his entire respect, you have to prove that you're strong in his eyes. In normal days, he would just either meditate, train, or study. Each divided evenly on that day with sleep, meals, and school time added together. Training, he believes, is a sacred ritual to strengthen one's soul and therefore, he looks down on those who use drugs like steroids or the like to get strength instead more than others. Abilities: Soul Perception: The ability that allows humans to perceive the souls of living people. By having such an ability, the user can be sensitive to the waves in the air, serious, and have good concentration. Saito's range at least spans to around a kilometer radius around him, though it is a tad weak because it is so spread out. He could sense and see souls at the very most. From what he could tell from a soul, is that he could tell how strong it is by the size of it and also sense if the owner of the soul, itself, intends harm which is heavily based from his meditations. Technique Name: (Ryusui Sabaki) Flowing Water Movement Effects/Description: A technique which allows you to dodge an attack and slip into the enemy's range in one rapid and fluid motion ready to counterattack. How this technique works begins with the human skeletal structure. The structure was made to help humans stand without hardly even using any muscular strength at all. It's known as the "natural posture" in martial arts but it is also draining state though. If you think about it, when you keep standing, it gets tiring... But if the user of this technique allows himself into this draining state temporarily and use all the unused muscles for standing to rotate the body... The user can dodge and slip into the enemy's range. But the thing about it is that it's completely useless from very long range. It has to be done up close. And also, to defeat it up close, the enemy must have an extremely high ability of reading the user's movements. This technique is very subtle and deceptive in the way that it looks like the user disappeared. For Saito, he can't use this technique all the time. If he did spam the technique, his joints would be damaged internally. He can use it five times before needing to rest at the moment. Combat Style: Saito learned the Tenshin Muto Ryu which teaches its students how to use a sword while also teaching them to poke at the eyes or the neck, kick the enemy away when needed to increase the range between the practitioner and the enemy, and some grappling when close up. His body figure is more shaped to be a speedster. However, he can make up for his lack of muscles to hit just much damage as those with them by having a good amount of bodily control over his muscles and his joints. By having such control, all of his movements are all heavily based on efficiency. He uses his head to fight his opponents and utilizes all sorts of strategies to win, no matter how dirty. After all, in combat, everything goes... Right? Miscellaneous Information: Has a thing for brunettes and blackettes. Knows acupuncture as it has a big role in his training. Strengths: [Good Speed] [Immense Bodily Control, but not total. Which helps make up for his lack of muscle to inflict a lot of damage.] [Lots of combat experience from the thugs, yakuzas, and real martial artists which helped him develop great timing and great reflexes] [Can read opponent's movements from special training for gomokuroku] [Can sense killing intents as a result from meditation for thirteen long years] Weaknesses: [No upper body muscles, so he's pretty weak if he just attacks normally.] [Long Range Enemies] [Can't fight without a sword very well] [Shorter than most people of his age] [Can't take solid blows as much as his peers in DWMA] Roleplay Sample: The bright laughing sun was glaring its hot rays against Saito. Nevada. “Jeez,” Saito thought warily, “America sure is damn hot here…” He was sweating profusely from his sweat glands as it made a furious attempt to cool him off and prevent his body from overheating in the sun. If he knew Nevada was this hot… He wouldn’t have put on his long thick and dark hakama in the day time. Carrying the sword cases which carried his bokutos, suburito, and katanas… Saito wearily walked up the long stairs which he found much to his displeasure. As he arrived to the summit, his eyes feasted on the dwellings of Death City and the Headquarters of DWMA. From here on out, he would be the pupil, or rather, student of the DWMA Academy. “Well…” Saito muttered, “That’s a sight…” Imp Edit [23/08/11]: appearance change Marie Edit [23/08/11]: picture change Imp Edit [25/08/11]: Combat level change Edited by Imp of Chaos, Aug 25 2011, 07:00 AM.
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Saito Minamoto: The Katana Meister of Tenshin Muto Ryu Saito's text is blue. Just put in blue. Saito's voice is like Edward Elric from FMA | |
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| Imp of Chaos | Aug 5 2011, 04:24 AM Post #2 |
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Hey~ It's me Imp. This is quite a good profile to begin with so hopefully we'll get through the modding process quick smart ^__^ Description Congratulations, you've obviously thought a lot about, and worked hard on this area - it really shows! History So far the history is interesting, and it has really piqued my interest! I would love to know more about how your character grew up :3 This is the part that is really important in your profile, because it is where you tie all of the other parts into a cohesive character. This is where you justify personality quirks, talk about how they learned special powers, what motivates them, and what goals they have for the future. A good history can set a good character profile apart from a great one, and helps you understand your character better :3 It's a good place to make your character unique too~ It would be great if you could talk a little about how he felt about being an orphan, how his life outside of training shaped his personality, and why he had multiple run ins with thugs :3 Personality Mature and polite doesn't seem to fit well with rash and quick tempered :3 You obviously have a good idea of what your character is like, but it just isn't as clearly defined here as it could be ^__^ Don't forget that not everyone expresses emotions in the same way (when I am angry I go quiet, but when someone else is angry they might rave, yell and break things). Make sure you tell us what makes your character angry, happy and sad, (what their triggers are) and what they do to express these emotions ^__^ Abilities At the moment your character is a little too powerful. It is important to know that on this site we have things called 'training threads' so your character can become more powerful and learn new abilities over time. At the moment could you please try to focus on your character either knowing soul perception, or your character being a better-than-average fighter. Overall The character looks quite interesting, but perhaps a little rushed. A few of your sentences are difficult to come to grips with, so it might benefit the profile as a whole if you went through and gave it the old spit and polish :3 |
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| Saito Minamoto | Aug 5 2011, 06:13 AM Post #3 |
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I think I'm done. Please look it over. |
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Saito Minamoto: The Katana Meister of Tenshin Muto Ryu Saito's text is blue. Just put in blue. Saito's voice is like Edward Elric from FMA | |
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| Imp of Chaos | Aug 5 2011, 12:41 PM Post #4 |
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Hey there, sorry the mod is so long coming ^__^ You have done great work so far, so I am sure it shouldn't take too long from here~ History Could you go into a little more detail of his training :3 it will give you a good opportunity to introduce us to Saito's master (he sounds interesting ^__^ ) Personality You've done a really great job here, and I feel like I have a good grasp of what Sai is like now. There are one or two things – you don't talk much here about what motivates him to be better than his parents. Talking a little about his attitude to training might be good as well, and how/if he makes friends, how is he when he is in a more 'relaxed' or 'casual' everyday setting? :3 It's just a good thing to think about because it is very likely to come up ^__^ I especially like the personality quirk of not being fond of heat. It is very interesting and I look forward to seeing how Sai plans to keep cool~ Abilities Please get rid of Soul Perception OR Dragon Ripper. Don't worry – later on you can learn new moves and techniques (like soul perception) after Sai has a couple of missions under his belt ~ Overall As a general note it is fine to have technical terms in you profile like hanbo bo bokuto, etc. but in RP not everyone will know what you are talking about ^__^;; or they might have different ideas as to what a bokuto is, so you might want to be careful to explain yourself when you are actually Rping. |
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| Saito Minamoto | Aug 5 2011, 03:10 PM Post #5 |
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I have done as much as I could for now... I think... But please look it over. |
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Saito Minamoto: The Katana Meister of Tenshin Muto Ryu Saito's text is blue. Just put in blue. Saito's voice is like Edward Elric from FMA | |
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| Imp of Chaos | Aug 6 2011, 05:53 AM Post #6 |
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Thanks for all the work you've done so far ^__^ your profile is really starting to shape up nicely. Abilities in Soul Perception please make sure you cover these points:
We want to know exactly what he can do with these powers so we can make sure they will be fair :3 in Flowing Water Movement: If you are outside of an enemy's range, they can't hit you, so there is no point dodging (for example if you are outside of my range and I throw a punch at you I wouldn't be able to connect). Could you explain a little more what you mean by 'dodging into an enemy's range'? Does this power mean that Sai will never be hit by an attack? Overall everything is starting to come into place. I think you will very soon be accepted ^__^ just to prime you for RPing on this forum (so before you can jump in) could you please check out our rules and guidelines. If you can't find them just ask on cbox and someone will be able to direct you there ^__^ |
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| Saito Minamoto | Aug 6 2011, 07:28 AM Post #7 |
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Yes, I have finally applied what was "missing". I'm ready for approval. Even though... I'm really pissed off at myself for missing such an obvious thing! DX
Edited by Saito Minamoto, Aug 6 2011, 05:06 PM.
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Saito Minamoto: The Katana Meister of Tenshin Muto Ryu Saito's text is blue. Just put in blue. Saito's voice is like Edward Elric from FMA | |
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| Imp of Chaos | Aug 7 2011, 02:27 AM Post #8 |
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ACCEPTED. This looks fine, thanks for working so hard on your profile :3 I really look forward to seeing you RP on the site with Sai~ There are just one or two things here I want to keep my eye on though, so if Sai turns out to be more powerful than I expected I might send you a PM to discuss further changes. Have fun! |
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