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Azure Sky; The Cold Demon
Topic Started: Jul 25 2011, 05:24 AM (710 Views)
Azure

Character Name: Azure Sky

Age: 15

Gender:Male

Type: Weapon

Partnered? No

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Clothing and description: Azure is a young boy with slender build that is very well toned. He has blue hair and startling crimson eyes. Azure tends to wear dark clothes that hug his body like skinny jeans during his down time, He likes the way they feel and he thinks he looks good in them. When he goes on a mission he wears a black ninja outfit so that he can blend in with the shadows better and have better mobility. He has a tattoo of a shuriken on his left pectoral muscle. Azure has very calm features and is quite handsome. Azure has several battle scars that are faintly visible on his chest and back, but has no noticeable ones on his face. Azure is constantly in pain, many people can tell by they agony portrayed in his deep crimson eyes and emotionless face. Azure's soul is blue.


History: Azure was raised in a clan of assassins, everyone in his family for generations was a Weapon. Though this fact was kept secret from those who didnt inherit the gene by age 8, those that didnt inherit the gene and were shunned. Naturally this fact was hidden from Azure aswell, but one day azure sneezed and his arm turned into a blade. His father told him all about his family's history and once he was finished with his training at home that he was to go to Shibusen. Ever since then Azure's father had begun teaching him the ways of silent assassinations. His father had set up brutally challenging opstacle courses that Azure was to complete with bells on his feet and arms. If he did not complete them or he completed them and the bells rang, there would be severe punishment. Day in and day out Azure went though hell just because he was born into this life. For a long time he resented his family and wished they would all disappear.
Then one day out of the blue, a young girl showed up at their doorstep asking to be trained as an assassin, her name was Kelly. This was not fate, Azure's father knew that she was a meister without a weapon and had asked her train and become Azure's meister. Kelly came from a family that had been partnered with Azure's for centuries. All of this was unknown to him though. Azure and Kelly trained together for a long time, she was hopeless but had lots of heart and determination. But finally she got the hang of it and Azure's father asked Kelly to be Azure's meister although they had previously agreed upon it. She accepted and since their bond was already strengthened though brutal training that they had together, they knew exactly what the other was thinking which made missions a lot easier. Nearly from the time he was 13 he was sent on missions of assasinations with his meister Kelly. Kelly was a very sweet girl and his best friend. The two were almost inseprable from the day they met. They had tons of exciting missions and hung out together. Kelly sadly died while fighting a golem, she was crushed to death by it. Azure was devastated for a long time believing that it was his fault, that he couldnt save her. Now Azure will stop at nothing to kill everything that he deems as "In his way". Azure has seemed to have lost nearly all of his humanity from that heart breaking incident. one year after Kelly's death Azure arrived at shibusen, and this is where his story continues.

Personality: Azure is not a happy person, he may seem like it on the outside but that is only a mask. Azure is a psychotic maniac who is willing to kill anything. He mainly thinks about killing. He is able to kill without even batting an eye, and it does not phase him. He never backs down from a fight and is willing to protect the people closest to him down to the very last drop of blood. Although he is a bit crazy, he is extremely loyal and a great person to have on your side. Azure is quiet most of the time and will rarely speak unless spoken to. He gets nervous around girls and his personality changes to a more nervous shy type. Azure is very hurt deep down inside, it feels like there is a hole that wont close. A dark void that Kelly's death ripped though his body and left it scarred and broken. Due to this it is very hard to make friends for him he might only want to be close to his meister and nobody else, because deep down inside he doesnt want to feel the pain of losing someone again.

Abilities:

Technique Name: Agony
Effects/Description: When someone is cut with Azure their blood thins and is unable to clot properly so that the wound closes half as fast as it normally would. So a tourniquet might be needed so there is not severe bloodloss. Only availble when in full transformation and wielded by meister.

Technique Name: Transform
Effects/Description: Azure is able to transform into his weapon form at will. Azure can change his weapon form at the command of his meister, switching from a kama with chain, or scythe. All of Azure's weapon blades are blue. Azure's scythe has jagged edges on the blade to maximize killing potential.

Kama with chain


Scythe


Technique Name: Partial Transform
Effects/Description: Azure is able to make his right arm up to the shoulder a blade from his scythe.

Combat Style: Way of the Assassin- Azure is an adept assassin, he sticks to the shadows and tries to strike the opponent before they have a chance to strike. He blends in really well with the shadows almost invisible while in one. He will also use a hit and run strategy, striking the opponent and then retreating to the shadows before they even know what happened.

Miscellaneous Information: Likes gummy worms

Strengths:


  • Able to blend in with the shadows, almost becoming invisible while in one.
  • Knows Ninjutsu and Aikido of a standard level.
  • Multiple Weapon forms

Weaknesses:


  • Cannot fight head on due to his training as an assassin he was never really taught how to do one on one combat.



Roleplay Sample:

Pupil Azure crept quietly in the darkness above the rafters, muffled conversation could be heard from below. Azure concentrated as his breath faded into the darkness that surrounded him. The smell of cigar smoke wafted up and got trapped in oak rafters that so carefully cradled Azure. Ever closer he crept, the almost non existing footfalls continued to connect with the soft oak.Be silent, so silent that the darkness accepts you as its kin Azure thought as he stopped and crouched down, he peered down over the rafters to confirm the identities of the three men down below. Azure smirked as the crime boss who had become a kishin egg chatted up a storm below. Azure lept down from the rafters and behind the man that was directly under the rafters. As Azure came down, his right hand became sharp and sliced through the man's neck, he died before Azure met the ground. Thirty seconds later the other two men were down for the count as well. The three red candies floated in the air. Azrure ate the souls and smiled as the mission was comeplete.
Edited by Azure, Aug 1 2011, 05:05 AM.
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Hi there Mist! I'm Imp and I'll be giving your profile a look over before it gets accepted~! So far this is a good profile, and I can see you've really put some thought into your character ^__^ It would be great if you could give us some more details, though, so we can know more about Azure :3 Don't be daunted if it seems like I am asking a lot, it's only because I am so intrigued by your character and want to know more! ^__^

Description

This is a great starting point, and already I can begin to picture your character in my minds eye! It would be great if you could go into a little more detail, however, as we have lots of artists on the site, and of course because this is an RP site! ^__^ so it's good to have a few key phrases for describing your character up your sleeve that you can re-use if necessary. Try to write this section in full sentences rather than dot points, as if you were giving a description to the police. Don't be afraid to add in a little about how their personality effects their appearance (ie. He is obviously untrustworthy, as many people can tell just by looking at his shifty eyes).

History

So far the history is interesting, and it has really piqued my interest! I would love to know more about how your character grew up :3 This is the part that is really important in your profile, because it is where you tie all of the other parts into a cohesive character. This is where you justify personality quirks, talk about how they learned special powers, what motivates them, and what goals they have for the future. A good history can set a good character profile apart from a great one, and helps you understand your character better :3 It's a good place to make your character unique too~

Make sure that your history covers all the basics like, how did they come to Shibusen, how did they find out about all their powers, What was their childhood like, and how did it influence Azure's personality ^__^

Personality

This is a great snapshot of the personality, but I was hoping you could flesh it out a little :3 You obviously have a good idea of what your character is like, but it just isn't as clearly defined here as it could be ^__^ Don't forget that not everyone expresses emotions in the same way (when I am angry I go quiet, but when someone else is angry they might rave, yell and break things). Make sure you tell us what makes your character angry, happy and sad, (what their triggers are) and what they do to express these emotions ^__^ Also, it would be great if you could move the bit about their shy personality traits from misc info, and put them in here :3

Abilities

Please remember that if an ability is not added in here then your character cannot do it. For example, a weapon with no weapon transformation in the ability section cannot turn into a weapon.

Please make sure you give a really good description for each ability. If possible give us a sentence for each of power, duration, and any drawbacks the power might have. Also give a brief description of how it looks or how it would be used in RP so that others know what their character is experiencing ^__^ Make sure you add in a weapon description in full transformation, and any partial transformations your character might have :3

Combat Style

This is great, but I'd love it if you could elaborate a little. This is the place to put down any martial arts your character learned in their history, and to tell us how good or bad they are at fighting. Could they take down Jackie Chan, or would they have trouble fighting their way out of a paper bag :P we want to know~

Strengths and Weaknesses

Strengths should be things that could help your character win a fight. Weaknesses should be things that might make your character lose a fight. It's great if you can go into a little detail – yes these are dot points but sometimes short answers can be confusing, and don't really tell us how something could help win or lose a battle. It's very important to make sure that the strengths and weaknesses balance each other out, so your character isn't too strong or too weak :3

Roleplay Sample

Although we don't have a minimum word limit for posts it's important to make sure you always try your best to make posts interesting, and to improve your writing prowess (even the best have room to improve~). If you ever feel stuck when writing try making a check list!

  • Describe surroundings – how does your character sense them?
  • What happened before now? What is your character reacting to?
  • How does your character feel about events so far? What are they thinking/planning?


Here at 42 we encourage people to RP in third person style, because it makes a thread easier to read as a whole when there are lots of Rpers ^___^

Overall

This is a great character, and I really look forward to seeing it fleshed out a little~ I think with a little love and care it could be a really fantastic character :3 I really can't wait to read more about Azure! ^__^ Well done~

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i hope that is better :)
Edited by Azure, Jul 25 2011, 05:41 PM.
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Hey Mist, doing good so far. Let's get this done~

History

Could you go into a little more detail about how he first discovered he was a weapon/first transformed?

Could you go into a little more detail about how his first meister died? This seems an important point

could you tell us how he came to be at Shibusen.

Personality

Could you explain who (if anyone) he is close to? How does he make friends if he is emotionless?

Overall

You have missed a few of my previous mods. I can sort of understand this because it was a long one, but in RP you will need to read other people's posts more carefully, so that you can create a cohesive story with them. Please either do the mods I request or explain to me in your next post why you have not. I am always open to discussion.
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okay, i think i fixed the other stuff but the meisters death thing. i dont think there should be specification, it is in there for the sole purpose of making character sorrowful and protective also i think putting a cause of death wouldnt really spice up my character any further.
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Abilities

Agony – this is a super interesting skill ^__^ I really like it as a creative ability. Could you give a little bit more description, however? I imagine the wound would eventually close up, but it just takes longer and more blood is lost? This skill is fantastic and it really fits in well with your character, so let's work at getting it well described~

Please make it only possible to use Agony when he is in full weapon form (and therefore being wielded by a meister). You can always upgrade later so he can use it with partial, but we don't like characters to start off too powerful ^__^

weapon transformation – could you please specify what weapon he actually turns into? (I assume a scythe?) and describe it a little? (Not all scythes look the same ^__^ )

Could you make 'partial transformation' a separate ability please? Also unless he has 5 blades, he can only create 1 blade for partial transformation – creating multiple bladed parts when the weapon form has only one blade is a death scythe ability only, and we do not accept death scythe characters straight off the bat.

Combat Style

Could you please tell us how successful he is as an assassin? He trained for a long time, but is he an adept or a master? I might ask you to keep him as an adept rather than a master, because he is a weapon, and not a meister (unless you plan for him to be a solo weapon for a long time).

please explain why he is not good at head on or direct conflict (this is one of his weaknesses).
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Editted :)
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Abilities

This is great, I like that you have put in more detail ^__^ for now please choose two weapon forms at the most.

strengths/weaknesses

blending with the shadows needs to be included as a part of his combat style. Could you tone it down a little as well please? :3

Please remove 'very skilled in Ninjutso and Aikido' as he is average (adept)

You might want to add multiple weapon forms as a strength, along with his special blood letting ability.

Overall

Please give our rules and guidelines a re-read. If you can't find them I am sure people on the cbox will help you out ^^
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Yoii yoii~~ Shinigami here ^_^ Imp is a little busy today so she has asked me to help you out a little. You've got a really interesting character, and I can see you have almost finished polishing it up :3

Description:
Could you please add a description of his weapon forms in here? It would be great to know what they look like, how they feel to hold, and how big they might be :3 I'd love to really get the sense I know his weapon forms from reading the description! ^^

History:
Nice job!

The only suggestion I would make would be to make sure you very clearly say when he joined Shibusen :3 At the moment it is unclear if he is a student there or if he is not a student.

I would also encourage you to re-read the rules like Imp said in the last modification ^_^ There is something in there that you would be interested in!

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