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Acilia Esposito; The Knight Meister
Topic Started: Jun 3 2011, 02:25 AM (695 Views)
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Character Name: Acilia Esposito, or Alice for short

Age: 16

Gender: Female

Type: Meister

Partnered? Yes, with Blue

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Clothing and description:
Acilia is average height, only 5' 7'' and she has a small frame, only weighting 125 lbs since she doesn't eat that much. She has some muscle but not alot, making her a bit weak and fragile.

Acilia has a blue dress with gold trim and a bit of light weight armor plates with brown and gold trimmed belt. A silver and sky blue cape on her back completes the dress. She usually has a blue silk ribbon in her hair matches great with her teal eyes.

Her Family's Sword, which is a silver broadsword with a wing style hilt and guard. The sword also has a spiral graved handel with a silver ball on the end as the slip guard. It also has her family name engvaded on the blade, which is why it is usually called The Sword of Esposito. The sword has never been used in combat and Acilia never wants to use it, so she keeps it above her bed as a reminder of her family.

History:
Acilia was born into the Esposito Family, a prominant noble family in Italy. As a child, she has always been an outcast due to her social status, but she did have one friend, a boy from another noble family, who she played with alot untill he was found missing one day, supposely because the boy's family had enemies who wanted revenge. So to fill her loneliness, at age 8 she picked up her first blade and she learn the ways of the sword. When she was 10, her immediate family was killed by a group of Assassins who wanted to get rid of the Esposito family influence and also burned down all of her's and her family's possessions. She moved with an Uncle who was in another country, where she continued her sword training, she was "knighted" at age 14, this ment she was a master swordswomen, knowing how to wield, and fight with, any type of sword. At age 15, her uncle gave her special armor, which was sword proof, bullet resistant, and weather resistent, most attacks would leave a bruise if anything, though she doesn't buise easily, the family sword, a map to Death City, and a small box that she was instructed not to open untill she reached the DWMA. Acilia started on her journey, not realizing what was in store for her. She ended up in Virginia for a while, during her stay she learned and played a few sports, gaining agility and speed and her athletic abilities. Acilia also learned a bit of English in Virginia, enough to get by atleast. A few months later after she left Virginia, she reached the DWMA she read the note and it read as follows:
The Note
 
Dear Acilia,
I hope you reached Death City safely. I brought you here because wheather you realize it or not, but you are a meister.
We sent you to this school so you can use your ability as a meister to help bring the world to a safer era, this is what your parents wanted. Please do your best.

Love,
Your Aunt and Uncle

After she cried on the steps of the DWMA for a bit, gathering a bit of attention, she walked in and enrolled. She was given enough money to get a home a little ways from the Academy, and now she continues her training in her spare time while attending classes.
Acilia is still shy and quiet because she has yet to make any friends at the Academy, when she does talk, she's usually soft almost like she is whispering.


Personality: Kind, down-to-earth, caring, and determined at times, willing to see things to the end. Acilia is quiet and shy, since she was always alone in her younger years due to her social status. She always gives a person a second chance and usually takes no for an answer. She is also gulliable at times, usually falling for what ever others say. She always thinks lesser about her self, feeling others are right and she is wrong.
Acilia has a bit of a thirst for vengence, wanting to bring the group of Assassins that killed her family to justice, which is where she gets her determination.

Abilities: None as of yet.

Combat Style:She has been praticing with swords for most of her life, around 8 years old she picked up her first blade and has wielded one ever since. Her tatic is usally let the enemy strike then wait for an opening or a weakness to show, then she will strike swiftly to end it all. She has already slashed her name into a wall blind folded during her years with her Uncle.

Miscellaneous Information: She likes having her family sword right next to her while she sleeps and speaks Italian sometimes.

Strengths:

  • Determined, willing to see things through to the very end.
  • Plenty of training with a sword
  • Athletic

Weaknesses:

  • Shy
  • Submissive and gulliable
  • Weak in Strength
  • Armor is weak against multiple gun shots, will scratch if sword hits it.


Roleplay Sample:
"This place must be Death City..." Acilia said softly as she gazes at the giant city. For the first time, she will step into a new world, a new adventure, and a new life. Acilia stares at the small box and then to her family sword on her hip. "Time to find the school..." After a half a hour of walking around the city, Acilia realises that she is lost and decides to asks the locals. The several locals she asked all said the same thing. "It's the giant castle in the middle of the city" And so after another half a hour, she reaches the steps to the Academy. Her Uncle intructed her to open the small box once she reached the DWMA. As she reads the note, Acilia falls to her knees and begins to cry for an unknown reason.
Acilia realizes now why she trained so much, why she was given the family sword and the armor, and why she came to Death City. It was all to continue the Esposito family. She was being enrolled as a pupil in the Death Weapon Meister Academy.
Edited by Sorai, Jun 8 2011, 02:10 AM.
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Yoii Axel ^_^

I like your new character! I can see you’ve made a nice effort with this one, and focused on making a cohesive character without too many bells or whistles~

Clothing:
Could you try to separate this into 3 paragraphs? Paragraph 1 could be her body, paragraph 2 be her clothes, and paragraph 3 be anything else she has (like her sword). The goal of this section is so you don’t need a picture ^_^ By reading this section I should know how she looks!

Good luck!

History:
This seems a little bit rushed. Could you go back through this and really strive to describe what made Acilia who she is? What moments defined her personality? What times helped her learn her skills? Why does she act the way she does?

Personality:
Great start! ^__^

Does she have any goals? What are his opinions on things? I’d love to know more about her~

You also mention that she is determined/willing to see things to the end, but she also takes no for an answer. Could you elaborate a bit on this?

You also mention she is shy in the weakness section. Could you go into some more detail in the personality section?

Combat”
As this character seems to be a ‘solo fighter’ who is a sword user, I’d really like it if you could dedicate a paragraph or two about how she fights. She’ll be doing it a lot, and if she’s been practising for years I imagine she’d know her way around a sword!

An indication about how good she is would be great too :3

Does she have any special combos or attacks?

Finally- could you let us know how she is a knight meister? =3 Go in lots of detail somewhere- this sounds like it could be really interesting!
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Ok, I guess no one told you yet.
I am Axel's cousin who he lives with so that explains the similar IP Address.
And I will expand on my character more then...
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Please define how much damage her ‘light armour’ can absorb.

History

You mention that she was knighted. Please elaborate as to what this actually means for her character, as I assume you don’t mean that she was good at horsemanship, and you haven’t actually defined what being a knight means for Alice. Usually only a head of state can award knighthood.

Also please justify her being a knight somewhere else in the profile if you intend to keep it, such as giving her the goals of protecting the weak, defenseless, helpless, and fighting for the general welfare of all (ie code of chivalry).

She cannot have both armour and her own sword. Choose one, and get rid of the other.

Please tell us why her family was assassinated.

Please tell us why her friend went missing.

Why does she need money from DWMA if she is from a rich family, of which she is the only surviving member?

Other than being able to be knighted, what did she learn as a noble? Horsemanship? Table manners? Snobbery? Please integrate her history with the rest of the character to make it more cohesive.

in general

How do you expect her to work with a partner if she already has a weapon?
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Accepted on the provision her armour doesn't turn out too OP
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