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| Sakura Ai | Mar 12 2011, 08:18 PM Post #1 |
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Character Name: Sakura Age: 12 Gender: Female Type: Weapon Partnered? No Image: Human Form Weapon Form Clothing and description: Sakura's eyes and hair are both brown, and very plainly the only difference in color is that her eyes are a slightly light color than her hair. She keeps her hair in a pony tail with some of her front hair sliding down her shoulders. She usually wears a pink shirt and black pants, although sometimes they might vary in color. The shirt is somewhat similar to a sailor's (except the color of course). Her shoes are normally white tennis shoes that are pretty much worn down so much that they look like their about to fall apart, but they are actually very sturdy. The only time she wears something different is on a special occasion: a pink and black striped dress, during which she has her hair down and in curls. During which she wears dress shoes or, depending on the weather, stockings and some sort of warm dress shoes. In weapon form she is a black bow with elegant designs. The ends of the bow have have exactly five knives that can be folded out and used for attack. The sizes vary from a small blade to close to a butcher's knife. The bow string is wound with a single pink ribbon, a rather small resemblance to what she wears every day. History: Sakura came from a small town in the smack middle of nowhere. Her father and mother (now deceased) were very kind to her and loved her with all their hearts. In school, however she was shunned and no one was her friend. Sometime in the second grade, a new kid joined the school. His name was Jack. Jack accepted her for who she was and became her friend. They did everything together, drawing, playing, reading, and even helping each other out. Sakura lived another two years in happiness: she had a loving family and a friend, which was all she thought she needed. That all changed when her mom died, giving birth to a stillborn. The whole family was in chaos for a while until things settled down, and even then things were hard for her. Her dad became a drunken man because he was so depressed. He often came home and beat her for no reason at all. Her dad locked her away in her room for long periods of time, and she only survived through the food Jack brought her when she let him in the window. Sorrow for her drove Jack to call the small squad of police men to the house. Sakura didn’t want it, of course, but Jack did it in secret. The police arrested her father for child abuse and Sakura was sent to the orphanage, where she was soon after adopted by Jack’s parents. Sakura had everything she could need again, happy she was alive. They grew, and eventually, in the fifth grade Jack got a bow and arrow from his parents. She would watch him for hours upon hours, shooting the bow to the target. She loved how the bow was sleek and shiny, with perfect arrows with points like silver. One day she sneaked into the shed and took out the bow and arrows while Jack was away for a few hours at a soccer game. She started shooting the arrows at the target, missing at first, but quickly became good at it. She hit the tree beside the target, then the outside circle, the next circle, the next, until she was making a bull’s-eye every time. While she was shooting she remembered how her father was let out of jail just a few days ago. A shiver ran down her spine. What if he came after her? When she was finally out of breath, she set the bow down and started walking to the house to get a drink of water but when she stepped forward she heard a sickening snap. She had broken the bow! What would happen now? Jack would be home soon. Sakura heard the car drive in the driveway. She picked the bow up and quickly stashed it in a hollow tree that was in the forest behind the house. She quickly ran back into the shed to hide, wanting a big black hole to swallow her up. She could already hear Jack’s footsteps slowly getting louder as they neared the shed. Sakura grimaced. What a terrible place to hide! Jack always checked on his beloved bow and arrows every time he came home! She closed her eyes and waited for him to confront her- but he didn’t. Something was wrong. He was looking at her, yes, and coming toward her, but the image was disoriented. Why was he so tall, and the furniture above her was way higher than is usually was? She silenced a gasp just in time as he picked her up. How could he pick her up, and was it even possible? She tried to wiggle, but couldn’t, why? He looked at the knives on the end of what used to be her arms and my legs. Given this moment to think, Sakura pondered over what she could have turned into. As he was lifting my higher to the table, she finally came up with it: she had turned into a bow! Jack soon left, looking a little puzzled. Sakura closed her eyes and imagined herself to be a human again. When she opened them she was normal! This was a lot for a fifth grader to comprehend, but she accepted it right from the very beginning: she was a weapon. She quickly ran to the house to apologize to Jack for breaking his bow. She did but Jack never questioned the bow form she was in. She didn't even know if he knew she was a bow. The year past, and eventually they were in sixth grade. Jack and Sakura were closer than ever and wanted to run away from the small town. They knew they were young, but they would probably manage, and so they did, just downright disappeared from the small little town. They went to a nice little forest and lived in a cave. Sakura made the suitable for living every day and Jack brought home the hard to come by food three times a day. They survived for about a week before they began to starve. Jack couldn’t find any more berries and fruits and Sakura couldn’t do much work without food in her. So they went out together one day to find food. There was a bunch of little squirrels and mice scuttling around, and they wished they could eat some, but they had no weapons- or did they? Sakura never forgot about the time where she had turned into a bow. Maybe, just maybe, they could kill the little animals with her. Sakura decided to try. She told Jack she could turn into a bow, and, as told, turned into a bow in front of him. Jack picked her up and looked at the string. He told her how he thought it could help them survive, but they didn’t have any arrows. He sat down in defeat, and pulled the string back a little, just out of boredom. An arrow appeared! It was blue-colored and glowing. Sakura noticed it to and spoke for the first time in weapon form (because she didn’t know she could) about how great that was and how they would be able to hunt. Jack merely nodded to her before setting out into the forest, shooting some animals and walking back with Sakura after she changed back to human form. Sakura cooked the animals on the few pans she had and they feasted. It went on like this for about a month, but when you’re doing about nothing, something’s bound to happen. It happened to be an unimportant day in the spring, when the food was plentiful. They were out hunting as usual, when they came upon a witch. See, the witch had been watching them for quite some time and thought they posed as a threat. She came at them at full force, shooting everything she had, that included exploding alligators. Of course, Jack tried shooting her with the arrows, but the witch always evaded them, but so did Jack. The battle lasted for two hours, the witch shooting her exploding alligators and Jack sending the arrows up. Jack pretended to die, closing his eyes after a alligator hit. “JACK!” Sakura screamed, terrified for her friend. She didn't know he was pretending. The witch came over, thinking it was over, “Well, your mine now, little missy” She reached for Sakura, who was still a weapon. But as soon as she was close enough, Jack shot her straight through the heart as a last effort to win the battle, and they did. After they cleaned the witch's blood from their clothes, they decided to go back to the village. When they got there, they settled in a small house on the edge. Jack's parents weren't happy about them leaving, of course, but when they saw how well they were, living on their own, his parents let them be. Sakura's father, however was a different situation. Only a few days after they settled he appeared at their house around midnight, drunk again. He shot the doorknob with the gun he was carrying, waking Sakura. She shifted the curtains aside and looked out. She gasped at the sight of her dad, entering the house. She sprinted to Jack's room and shook him awake, "Jack, JACK! Wake up!" Unfortunately Jack was a sloooow waker, "Waa-?" He said, quickly falling back to sleep. Sakura was alarmed to see the bottle of pills next to his bed. They were sleeping pills. Jack took sleeping pills? What a wonderful time to find out. She ran down the stairs to come face-to-face with her dad, "Daddy..." She said, trying to guide him out the door. He, instead pushed past her mumbling something that was indistinguishable. He climbed the stairs, sauntering a little. Sakura tried to block his way over and over again, but he just pushed her to the ground repeatedly. He finally got to Jack's room and opened the door to find a sleeping Jack. He looked so peaceful, sleeping there. Sakura almost forgot the threat until her dad drew the gun he had, pointing it at Jack. Sakura tackled him unsuccessfully, just being flicked away because he was so big and her so small. She recoiled to jump to the gun, to save her friend. It all happened in slow motion: Sakura almost to the gun, in midair, the trigger being pulled just before she got there and just missing her hand. And finally the bullet. That fateful metal bullet. It hit Jack in the heart, but unfortunately not killing him- quickly anyways. Sakura landed on the ground again in horror, staring at the wound, just beginning to fill with blood. Sakura screamed, but it was quickly cut off, due to her going slightly crazy. She smiled, but it was off, it was one that is described as blood thirsty. She took his head and lead him down stairs, knowing he wouldn't hurt her, well kill her at least. She stopped and let him sit in a chair, where he blacked out because of the alcohol. "Excellent" She hissed into his ear. She quickly rushed outside and into the forest. She quickly picked the red berries growing on the nearest bush. She hurried back to her dad, shoving them in his mouth while stroking his throat to make him swallow it. These were what Sakura called Death Berries, for she had seen the little squirrels who tried to eat them die off quickly. Making sure he was still knocked out, she raced upstairs to find Jack was awake now, but still laying down. She kneeled by Jack and held his hand, “Jack! Jack! Please… stay with me” She stared into his dying eyes, watched the light slowly fade out of them. Sakura was in turmoil, running away, crying, and never stopping. Right out the front door and to the other side of the village, the way she had never been ouside of the village. She had right past everything, not giving anything another thought. But, since nothing can move forever, she finally ran out of gas and collapsed into the barren sand than lay around her. She was in a desert, nothing here, nothing there. She would die here, and never have to live with the ache in her heart. But wait- there was a large town in the middle of the desert. Why was there a town in the middle of a desert? Sakura got up and ambled toward it sadly. She walked into the town and saw a big building. She walked further to reach it and finally did, but soon after knocking on the door, collapsed. She had knocked on the door of a big building, the big building of the Death Weapon Meister Academy. (I dont make decisions on what would have happened, but lets just say the DWMA took her in) Personality: Sakura is a not a very smiley type of girl, although she is always wanting to cheer people up- that is, unless she is in a bad mood, doesn't care, or is just plain lazy. She is an easily-stressed type of person that always wants to take the easy way out, however she will most likely just suggest it and then do whatever else her comrades will do if they don't want to do what she suggested. She is very flexible and will practically do anything her comrades want to do, unless she thinks it's stupid or is being lazy again- but watch out! If you don't want to do what she wants to do repeatedly, and for a long time, she will probably get angry with you. Sakura also doesn't like making decisions either. When facing a hard decision she can't immediately decide on, she will run away from it, (physically and/or mentally) or just push it onto someone else, if possible, but if her friends are making a decision, then she will be happy to help out. She does, however, have a strong will and an urge to protect her friends, or even a complete stranger, if she thinks they are worthy enough. She accepts people for who they are, not what they look like, but like any other person, if you’re just plain weird, she won't want to hang out with you. Earlier I said she was more of a stressed, or in this case, a stressed and responsible person. I just wanted to make it clear that that doesn't mean that she doesn't like having fun or enjoying herself. Abilities: Ability 1 = Double knife Form Ability 2 = Super bow Form Technique Name: Double Knife Form Description: In Double Knife form, the bow splits down the central point of the front, creating two sets of knives, connected by the former draw string. The string is now fortified and can extend and retract to any size, which is similar to a rope. Again, the knives can be bent in and out to create more or less damage. As an alternative of shooting the meister’s wavelength, Sakura now makes the knives stronger by covering in a thin film of it. This energy gives the knives a glow, but yet again the color depends on the meister’s soul. When the meister doesn’t want to use the mode anymore, s/he can put the two halves pack together for an immediate seal, transferring to the normal mode again. Technique Name: Super Bow From Description: During Super Bow form, the bow is back to normal. However, the pink ribbon glows neon blue and shoots arrows with ten times the force. After shooting five arrows, though, she has to recharge for four posts. During these four posts, the ribbon turns black, but more of a faded black. When the bow is fully recharged, the string will turn pink again and shoot the regular arrows. But she will also be able to use the blue arrows again. Strengths:
Weaknesses:
Roleplay Sample: Sakura woke up. She was on the hospital bed, an I.V. line attached to her arm. She stared at it in amusement. So they had decided to take in a girl like her? She smiled a little until she remembered why she was there in the first place instead of with Jack. Sakura turned on her side looked at the white wall that was to her right. She wished someone would come and take her out of this hospital bed and get her some real food. She didn’t like needles one bit. She took her gaze off of the wall to look at the place where the needle pierced her arm. She studied it for a little, but it made her want to throw up so she looked away again, turning so that she could just look at the ceiling. What time was it? She hadn’t seen what was on her left yet. She turned to it and found that there was a window she looked out of it, only to find that it was raining, so she couldn’t tell what time it was. She could, however tell it was day though. She blinked and reached toward it, longing to go outside. She quickly pulled her hand back to the bed. It didn’t feel right, she should thank the people first. She looked around and found the door, hidden behind the curtain. She walked out of it, dragging the I.V. with her, “Hello?” She said cautiously. She spotted someone coming down the hall. But who was it? They dressed more like a pupil than a normal person... Edited by Sakura Ai, Mar 20 2011, 06:11 PM.
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| Shinigami | Mar 13 2011, 02:17 AM Post #2 |
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Hey there Sakura, it’s great to see you have thought so much about your profile! ^__^ There are a few things it would be great if you could change around, just to make sure it is a little more streamlined for your readers :3 First of all, I know you say that you don’t want us to ‘blame you for bad writing skills’ but here at 42 we like to encourage everyone to grow and become better. I know that I have become much better at writing since I started RPing, and I owe that to people who pointed out my mistakes so that I could learn from them! While your writing is not bad, we at 42 believe everyone has room to grow ^__^ Second thing is- large blocks of text can be hard on the eyes. It would be great if you could break up your sections into paragraphs for ease of reading. Last of all (before we get into a few more profile specific mods) is that it would be great if you could get rid of things like ‘When making the thread for your character, please make sure that it has both the [Character Name] and their [Type] for easy reference’ as these are just meant as instructions when you are writing the profile :3 Pictures These are quite large. They are fine, but could you please put them in spoiler tags like so: [spoiler=Human Form][img]http://i53.tinypic.com/2chm5oj.png[/img][/spoiler][spoiler=Weapon Form][img]http://i55.tinypic.com/2nkjjg9.jpg[/img][/spoiler] History You mention that both of her parents are dead – this is fine but I am curious to hear how her father died. As I said before it would be great if you could divide this into paragraphs. Abilties: Could you write 2 abilities: Ability 1 = Bow form Ability 2 = Double knife form? If she has a partial transformation (eg: Like when Soul turns his arm into a scythe) could you have that as Ability 3? Overall This is a great profile so far and I look forward to seeing the mods you make to it ^__^ Edited by Shinigami, Mar 13 2011, 02:19 AM.
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| Sakura Ai | Mar 13 2011, 06:41 PM Post #3 |
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Ok, revised. I might have missed some stuff. If I did, please let me know so I can fix it!
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| Shinigami | Mar 14 2011, 12:01 PM Post #4 |
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Hey there Sakura! You've made some great changes so far. There are just a few more things I'd like you to look at :3 Abilities: Could you please organise this section into separate abilities that are each in the same format?
This should be done for all techniques and transformations - it makes it easier for me to mod each thing without adversely affecting any of the others :3 |
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| Sakura Ai | Mar 14 2011, 10:08 PM Post #5 |
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Ok! Done. I think. I keep seeing changes to my post when I go in to edit it. Could it be you? Or is it just because of my short term memory loss? |
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| Shinigami | Mar 16 2011, 09:24 AM Post #6 |
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Hi again Sakura! I edited your profile initially, but I only changed the topic title to say “Sakura” instead of “Greetings” ![]() Partial Transformation: In your history this partial transformation seems really strong! She is able to climb ceilings, stick onto ceilings while her hair is elsewhere and big up big heavy men. Could you please drastically reduce the awesomeness of this partial transformation? Personality: Could you please break the personality up into smaller paragraphs? :3 It makes it much easier to understand her personality when similar things are all in the same paragraph. Meister: I thought I should mention~ It is ‘meister’ or ‘technician’ or ‘wielder’ rather than ‘mister’ (mister = Mr) Super Bow Form: Could you simplify the drawbacks on this? It’s a great idea what you have, but it might be really hard for you, your partner and the admins to make sure you are following the rules you are setting down. I would suggest only have 1 “cooldown,” rather than having 2. I would also suggest choosing to either use minutes or posts, but not both ![]() Strengths & Weaknesses: These are a summary of your character. If you character was Black*Star the strengths might very quickly list how he is strong, fast, and has an awesome Demon Weapon partner. However, his weaknesses would say he is stupid and prone to mistakes. So even though you have told us heaps, it’s really good to summarise (both for you and me) your characters best and worst points in here ^^ |
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| Sakura Ai | Mar 18 2011, 07:52 PM Post #7 |
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Hello again! Partial Transformation: Lol, sorry, I think it was that she hung on to a pillar- but I think i'm going to change this completely. Let me know that you think. Personality: Done! Meister: Sorry- I have problems with spelling XD I'll try to fix every one I find. Super Bow Form: Ok! Let me know what you think. Strengths & Weaknesses: Done again! |
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| Shinigami | Mar 19 2011, 12:59 AM Post #8 |
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Great job Sakura! ^__^ Could you please choose either Super Bow Form or Levitating? These are both really cool skills :3 I'd be okay with you learning the skill you get rid of down the track, when Sakura becomes more experienced. But at the moment I think she should only have 2 abilities, rather than 3. On this website characters are allowed to level up and grow, and you do this by completing a training thread :3 |
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| Sakura Ai | Mar 19 2011, 01:58 PM Post #9 |
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-dies- Gahhhh! Many decisions... but worth it- I hope. I think I'm going to chose super bow form- but complete a training mobober later for the levitation. |
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| Shinigami | Mar 20 2011, 06:37 AM Post #10 |
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Great job! You're really improving Sakura; I hope you're proud of yourself! ^__^ All you've got left to do is to very carefully read the Rules & Guidelines click here |
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