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Sylo Vlandel; Meister
Topic Started: Jan 25 2011, 07:21 AM (544 Views)
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Character Name: Sylo Vlandel (Nick name: Sy (Sigh) )

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Type: Meister

Partnered? No


Clothing and description: Standing at 5 feet 9 inches tall with brown/black thick hair, a medium but toned build, and light white skin, Sylo looks a bit menacing from a distance. He likes to wear darker clothing, often having some kind of tribal design on them. His dark brown eyes betray this however. They tend to switch from uncaring and laid back to mildly interested, but tend to stay laid back and bored. His favorite shirt is black and has a white tribal dragon that loops around from the bottom left of his shirt to the top right at the neck. His jacket, which he wears regardless of weather, is also black. It has no markings or designs on it though. His pants are, guess what, black and plain as well, but cargos so that he can carry lots of what ever he wants. On his right hip he wears a dull gray chain that connects to a belt loop to a wallet in his back pocket. Around his neck is a necklace; a black gem fashioned into a screaming skull on a black rope. On the inside of his jacket in a various array of small knives. Some larger and more ornate than others, and some simple but deadly. He doesn't use them much, they are there for entertainment purposes and a backup should he need one.

History: Sylo's family traveled a lot, and by a lot: he has never been in one place for more than 2 weeks at a time. His parents never told him, or his sister why they moved around so much, and seemed to do it on a whim. Doing this exposed him to many different fighting styles and cultures, even if only for a short time.

His parents, both meisters, never really liked him. They loved him because they were his son, but they didn't like him. He was extremely lazy and would rather sleep than do any work at all. At times, he was even too lazy to get his own food. Although this only pertained to things like work, which was abundant since they were always moving. His parents weapons didn't mind him that much and were more tolerant of his laziness, often being charged with watching him while his parents were busy.

He tended to be more active in things that didn't involve work such as fighting or watching fights or exploring what ever town they were in. This isn't to say that he was violent, he just enjoyed a good spar every now and then with the boys of what ever neighborhood he was in at the time. In doing so he picked up many different fighting styles and mixed them in with his own.

Since his parents didn't trust him very much and his was constantly being watched by someone, he became adept in sneaking. Eventually, he learned how to blend with the shadows (hence his dark clothing) and even mask his soul so that they wouldn't be able to find him as well as manipulate his Wave Length in other ways.

One one particular outing he snuck away from his parents and explored the city they were in at the time. At the same time, a local bunch of hoodlums had planned on setting fire to a local factory. As his luck typically ran, he was walking by just as they did the deed. He was lazy, not malicious and didn't believe in random acts of violence unless warranted. This was one of those times. He confronted the boys and beat them all, all 7 of them. Just as he was leaving the local authorities arrived. Upon seeing the incapacitated boys and Sylo walking away, they assumed he had done it and arrested him. Instead of taking him to jail, they took him to his parents. One could call this both a blessing and a curse. As soon as he got home they labeled him a problem child, regardless of his story to the contrary.

He was placed under house arrest and closely watched by a parent and their weapon at all times from that point on. Once they reached their next destination, Death City, his parents made arrangements to have him enrolled as a student at Shibusen, hoping it would "set him straight". He saw this as them abandoning him, and from that point on, he had no parents.

Personality: Sylo tends to be rather withdrawn, enjoying to watch and listen rather than take part in. If he isn't watching then he is probably asleep. Don't let this fool you however, his temper isn't to be trifled with, although few things set him off. Among these things are senseless violence, seeing others being bullied, being pushed to do things he would rather not do, or being attacked without reason. On the flip side of this though, if he some how manages to befriend someone then he will stick with them threw thick and thin, regardless of what they do. On a normal day, he is quiet but friendly if approached. He doesn't have many hobbies other than sleeping, but his next favorite thing to do is run. Not just run on the ground, but run across rooftops, jump the gaps between buildings, climb things, and other things like that. He will often time himself to see how fast he can get from one place to another. Sylo's emotions are difficult to read because he tries his best to remain impassive, although there are a few clues as to how he is feeling. If he is upset or mad about something, he will often have a blank stare on his face, one that says "I don't care what happens now". If he is happy, or at least in a good mood, he tends to grin a bit and, a bit more obviously, air guitar along with what ever song he is listening to, depending on the song. Although he doesn't look it, Sylo is actually quite energetic. Lazy yes, but in being lazy he bottles up all of his energy. At times, his energy will get the best of him, especially if he is in a particularly good mood, and he may act a little silly. These times don't happen often, but they still happen. Although he used to enjoy sparing with others, since coming to Shibusen, that has left him.

Abilities:

Technique Name: Soul Sight
Effects/Description: With a relatively small amount of concentration, Sylo can see and feel other peoples souls if they are near enough. The closer they are the easier it is for him. To him, souls appear to be small flames that vary in size and color depending on the person and feel warmer the closer he gets to the person or people.

Technique Name: Soul Track
Effects/Description: As a result of Soul Sight, Sylo can track a specific Soul he sees. When he does this, the soul will appear brighter to him if it is within seeing distance and he will feel a gently tugging like sensation. He can track souls that are at a max of half a mile away, but it is difficult and he can become easily confused and mix up his target with other souls. The closer the soul the easier it is for him to track.

Technique Name: Soul Clone
Effects/Description: Sylo can sense the wave length of those around him and force his to watch almost exactly so that if there were any some else around that could sense souls, they wouldn't be able to pick his out unless they were extremely familiar with him or particularly adept at sensing souls. He will typically use this ability if he is in a large crowd, although it is not necessary. If he concentrates hard enough he can remember wave lengths he has copied before and copy them again. He can't do this for as long as he could if he could actually sense the wave length he is copying, only about half the time. (in sight = 6-8 posts)(remembering = 3-4 posts)


Combat Style: Sylo prefers to let his opponent make the first move and then end the fight quickly there after, but if the fight drags on he will begin to attack rather than defend. When he fights, he can either flow from one position and attack to the next or strike as fast as an arrow and as random as a rain storm. It all depends on whom he is fighting and why. His abilities aren't quite masterful yet, but he would be a handful for most people. (intermediate). His weapon preference would be anything that is bladed, hes not exactly picky.

Miscellaneous Information:

  • He dislikes large groups of people that he doesn't know. As a result, he detests public speaking.
  • He tends to hum and not know it
  • He enjoys night time better than any other time
  • He likes high up places like roofs or towers or even the rafters in a room, so if you think he isn't around, it would be best to look up.
  • He has a horrendous fear of spiders, or anything else that crawls
  • He is almost always listening to music. Mostly metal, rock, techno, or some variation thereof
  • He is almost always idly spinning a knife of some kind in his hand and will some times pretend it a guitar pick and play air guitar with it.
  • He likes fire, or flaming things. He's not sure why though.

    Strengths:

    • hand-to-hand combat
    • gathering information. Because of his willingness to watch and listen carefully and the fact that he can hide himself well, allows him to be proficient at gathering information.
    • sneaking
    • speed, both running and striking. He can either run a great distance at a moderate pace, or a short distance sprinting, both without stopping. He is fast enough to run up a 5 foot wall, letting his running momentum carry him most of the way up. His punches tend to be difficult to follow as well, because of how fast they are.

    Weaknesses:

    • Indecisive
    • doesn't do well in groups
    • bright lights, meaning he doesn't like direct, clear sun light or anything brighter than that.
    • loud noises, he finds them distracting and irritating.
    • fighting more than one opponent at once. Example: He would do better against 5 enemies that attack 1 at a time, than 2 enemies that attack together.
    • Weak. He may be fast, but he's not exactly strong. Strong enough to take care of local thugs with ease, but a Kishin egg would pose a problem for him.
    • Clumsy. Just because he like to run on rooftops, doesn't mean he is always sure footed, hes fallen more than once and has a tendency to get his feet tangled, which could prove fatal in battle.
    • Fighting unarmed. Although he is adept at hand-to-hand, he fights better if his opponent is unarmed as well. If they are not, and are wielding a weapon, Sylo tends to get nervous or unsure of himself which leads to greater amounts of clumsiness or indecisiveness.
    • Ranged combat. Sylo prefers an up close and personal style of fighting, so fighting someone who can hit from a distance would defiantly prove difficult for him.

    Roleplay Sample: As was his usual, Sylo was sleeping on the roof of a single story building; it was about lunch time and he was supposed to be in class. This too was normal as he didn't go to class much. He didn't see the point, as he slept in there anyways. On this particular day however, a local gang of boys had decided to hold their weekly meeting there. It was to decide which shop to loot for the next week. Upon arriving on the roof, the boys saw the sleeping Sylo, and their leader, a big tough looking guy, called out to him. "Hey! You! Get outta here 'fo we beat the crap outta' you!" He said,yelling and pointing. Sylo's reply to this was to crack an eye open and look at the group. He made a quick assessment as to who he would attack first if it came to that. "Come on now...this roof is big enough for the both of us isn't it?" He asked, sounding friendly. There was a moment of silence followed by a sharp crack and a pain in Sylo's head. His eyes flew open, looking for the source of his pain. He spotted it quickly; a brick. He looked at the group and saw that quite a few of them were holding similar objects. The bigger boy spoke up again. "I don't think you heard me....get off our roof..." Sylo glared at them for a moment and slowly stood up. "I don't see your name on it, what makes it yours?" Another brick was thrown. This time Sylo was expecting it though. Ducking, the brick sailed harmlessly over his head and into the ally below. "Look guys, I don't want to fight you but I-" He had to stop as another brick was thrown. That was it, he had given them plenty of chances to leave him be but they ignored him. This time, instead of dodging the small, red missile, he plucked it out of the air, followed its path backwards a bit, turned it into a spin, and launched it back at the large boy. It hit him square in the middle of his head with a dull thud like noise. Everything was still for a bit, but then the boy's puplis became wider and he fell over, out cold. The group looked at Sylo, a few jumped forward brandishing knives and pipes. They could have taken him, if they had been smart about it, but they were stupid. They attacked one at a time. This gave him time to think and plan. a boy with a lead pipe attacked first. Sylo ducked sideways and grabbed the boys pipe, twisting it from his grasp. He then spun it once and brought it down on the boy's neck, knocking him out. One with a knife was next. The boy attacked with a simple lunge, which sylo side stepped and counted with a sharp smack to the back of the boy's head with the pipe. While, Sylo was concentrating on Knives, another boy with a baseball bat approached him and swung for his leg. This one connected, making it feel like he had been stabbed because the hard wood had connected with his hip. Sylo wheeled around in a flash and struck the boy in the jaw with the pipe, making him spin and fall to the ground. The other boys weren't as brave as their friends, and fled, lest they be struck down as well. Sylo dropped the pipe where he stood, and limped back over to his edge of the roof to continue his nap.
    Edited by Ka-HinoteKarite, Jan 29 2011, 06:23 AM.
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Could you please get rid of

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When making the thread for your character, please make sure that it has both the [Character Name] and their [Type] for easy reference


and any other explanations for the sections that may still be in here? :3

Clothing and Description

could you please give us an idea of his skin tone?

History

Although there are one or two spelling/grammar errors, overall this is a good history. It explains Sylo nicely and helps to make the character cohesive. Well done~

Personality

Does Sylo have any hobbies? You mention in the history that he enjoys sparing, has this changed since he entered Shibusen or is it still the case? :3 What does he do when he gets angry? How does he express happiness?

Abilities

soul sight – what do souls look/feel like? Can he see/feel through soul protect? What is the outermost range of the ability?

Soul clone – how long can he keep it up for both when he is near someone and when he is trying to remember their wavelength?

Double tap – when you say a large electric shock, do you mean a fatal one? Or something that might incapacitate an enemy (depending on their power level)? (basically, what kind of effects do you think a successful double tap would have on a person or kishin egg)

Combat Style

Sylo already has quite a few abilities for a beginning meister, so could you please define what level he is at in unarmed combat (ie. Rookie, intermediate, or master). Could you add in a little about his ability with a weapon and/or weapon preferences or if he wants to be a loner.

Strengths and Weaknesses

Could you please justify/elaborate on his speed and strength in the Combat section so I know that he isn't as fast as the speed of light and as strong as superman, as you haven't mentioned it much elsewhere.

could you please elaborate a little more on these – for example you say bright lights are a weakness and loud sounds. Why? Is it because he makes bright lights and loud sounds all the time or is it because it frightens him?

Could you re-write this, “fighting more than one opponent at once, meaning 2 opponents that are attacking at the same time rather than 5 that attack one at a time.” so that it makes more sense. 2 opponents are not 1 opponent, although I would have to agree that 5 opponents are more than 2. Does he do better fighting large groups than small groups, or small groups than large groups?

Could you please add in some real battle weaknesses to match his strengths? At the moment he is speedy, strong, master of combat, with special soul strike abilities and no real weaknesses. Unless the kishin eggs require him to do some public speaking it would be great if you could think of ways he might fail in battle =P

Overall

This is an interesting profile, and I have enjoyed reading it – especially your history. I think that the abilities are quite unique and interesting for a meister but could do with a little bit more explanation. The whole profile is quite good, but could do with a glance through (although I know it was getting rather late when you finished it =P)

You might also benefit from looking through our rules and guidelines one more time.
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Edited the areas stated....
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Could you please get rid of

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When making the thread for your character, please make sure that it has both the [Character Name] and their [Type] for easy reference

and any other explanations for the sections that may still be in here? :3

You still have : “The powers and special abilities that make your character different to a normal human being.” in your profile. Please make sure you are very careful in completing the requested modifications so I don't have to ask you more than once =P It'll get boring for you.

Personality

The additions you have made to this are really great; you've done a fantastic job fleshing out your character.

Abilities

I know I ask for a lot but could you please complete all of the edits I last asked for? I will continue modding when you have addressed everything ^___^
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Its fine, you only ask because it needs to be done...I'm sorry I'm making you repeat yourself >.<
I think I managed to fix what you asked for so that it is now satisfactory...
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Yoii Ka-Hi!

Description:
Sylo looks like quite the punk~

Very well described :3 Perhaps you have some personal experience with this clothing?

History:
I know the ‘lazy but an awesome fighter and loves to fight’ is a fairly common theme in characters, and you don’t need to change this, but I think you could tweak it a bit to make the character flow a lot better ^_^ It takes an awful lot of work to get even semi-decent at fighting, and it takes a proactive person to start beating up hoodlums or asking kids to fight him and teach them their cool moves.

But yes. You don’t have to change this, but I think it would improve your character =3

Soul Sight:
Could you please split ‘soul sensing / tracking’ from ‘soul sight’? :3 And perhaps go into a bit more detail about it? eg: If he has to have met that person before, or have met them lots of times, or if they need to be close or far away … You get the idea ^__^

Could you please also choose Soul Clone or Double Tap, but not both abilities? You can learn the other one after Sylo completes a few missions, but for a Shibusen ‘novice’ he seems to know a lot of techniques ^_^

Strengths/Weaknesses:
Could you explain why he is good at collecting information? There didn’t seem to be a personality trait or ability that lends itself to this. Perhaps go into a bit more detail about how he is good at collecting information? ^_^

Overall:
I can see you've put quite a bit of effort into the profile and its paying off! It looks quite good and polished :3
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Thanks, I'm trying to get it fixed ^^;

History:
I though I had addressed that? He's just lazy when it comes to work, like manual labor, other wise he is rather active.

Abilities:
I'm not sure what you mean by "split", could you explain, please?
Alright, the only reason I had 3 was being I had been told that 3 was ok to have.

Strength/Weakness:
I could elaborate on why he is good at gathering information, but I did say he would rather watch and listen than participate, but you're right, I'll add somethings in to support this.

Edited?: yes

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Thanks for the prompt edits ~

Laziness:
I guess I’m just a little bit confused about his laziness. At times it seems like he is lazy for everything, eg:
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He was extremely lazy and would rather sleep than do any work at all. At times, he was even too lazy to get his own food

But then at other times ‘lazy’ just means ‘does not like to do things.’ (eg: manual labour).

I think you are okay to leave the laziness as it is, but I think the people who read the profile will read ‘he is very lazy’ and think of Shikamaru Nara from Naruto (the lazy smart guy who was lazy 24/7).

Soul Sight:
Could you please change the ability soul sight from ‘He can see souls, and then also follow them’ to:
  • ability 1: he can sense souls
  • ability 2: he can track/follow souls


Overall:
You're very close to approval! ^___^ Only 1 thing to modify ( and 1 extra optional modification)!
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Requested edit has been made.
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If you want you can still have the "I track people using soul perception," I just wanted you have it as a different ability, rather than as the same ability as soul perception. =3
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