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| Tweet Topic Started: Jan 25 2011, 07:21 AM (542 Views) | |
| Ka-HinoteKarite | Jan 25 2011, 07:21 AM Post #1 |
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Character Name: Sylo Vlandel (Nick name: Sy (Sigh) ) Age: 17 Gender: Male Type: Meister Partnered? No Clothing and description: Standing at 5 feet 9 inches tall with brown/black thick hair, a medium but toned build, and light white skin, Sylo looks a bit menacing from a distance. He likes to wear darker clothing, often having some kind of tribal design on them. His dark brown eyes betray this however. They tend to switch from uncaring and laid back to mildly interested, but tend to stay laid back and bored. His favorite shirt is black and has a white tribal dragon that loops around from the bottom left of his shirt to the top right at the neck. His jacket, which he wears regardless of weather, is also black. It has no markings or designs on it though. His pants are, guess what, black and plain as well, but cargos so that he can carry lots of what ever he wants. On his right hip he wears a dull gray chain that connects to a belt loop to a wallet in his back pocket. Around his neck is a necklace; a black gem fashioned into a screaming skull on a black rope. On the inside of his jacket in a various array of small knives. Some larger and more ornate than others, and some simple but deadly. He doesn't use them much, they are there for entertainment purposes and a backup should he need one. History: Sylo's family traveled a lot, and by a lot: he has never been in one place for more than 2 weeks at a time. His parents never told him, or his sister why they moved around so much, and seemed to do it on a whim. Doing this exposed him to many different fighting styles and cultures, even if only for a short time. His parents, both meisters, never really liked him. They loved him because they were his son, but they didn't like him. He was extremely lazy and would rather sleep than do any work at all. At times, he was even too lazy to get his own food. Although this only pertained to things like work, which was abundant since they were always moving. His parents weapons didn't mind him that much and were more tolerant of his laziness, often being charged with watching him while his parents were busy. He tended to be more active in things that didn't involve work such as fighting or watching fights or exploring what ever town they were in. This isn't to say that he was violent, he just enjoyed a good spar every now and then with the boys of what ever neighborhood he was in at the time. In doing so he picked up many different fighting styles and mixed them in with his own. Since his parents didn't trust him very much and his was constantly being watched by someone, he became adept in sneaking. Eventually, he learned how to blend with the shadows (hence his dark clothing) and even mask his soul so that they wouldn't be able to find him as well as manipulate his Wave Length in other ways. One one particular outing he snuck away from his parents and explored the city they were in at the time. At the same time, a local bunch of hoodlums had planned on setting fire to a local factory. As his luck typically ran, he was walking by just as they did the deed. He was lazy, not malicious and didn't believe in random acts of violence unless warranted. This was one of those times. He confronted the boys and beat them all, all 7 of them. Just as he was leaving the local authorities arrived. Upon seeing the incapacitated boys and Sylo walking away, they assumed he had done it and arrested him. Instead of taking him to jail, they took him to his parents. One could call this both a blessing and a curse. As soon as he got home they labeled him a problem child, regardless of his story to the contrary. He was placed under house arrest and closely watched by a parent and their weapon at all times from that point on. Once they reached their next destination, Death City, his parents made arrangements to have him enrolled as a student at Shibusen, hoping it would "set him straight". He saw this as them abandoning him, and from that point on, he had no parents. Personality: Sylo tends to be rather withdrawn, enjoying to watch and listen rather than take part in. If he isn't watching then he is probably asleep. Don't let this fool you however, his temper isn't to be trifled with, although few things set him off. Among these things are senseless violence, seeing others being bullied, being pushed to do things he would rather not do, or being attacked without reason. On the flip side of this though, if he some how manages to befriend someone then he will stick with them threw thick and thin, regardless of what they do. On a normal day, he is quiet but friendly if approached. He doesn't have many hobbies other than sleeping, but his next favorite thing to do is run. Not just run on the ground, but run across rooftops, jump the gaps between buildings, climb things, and other things like that. He will often time himself to see how fast he can get from one place to another. Sylo's emotions are difficult to read because he tries his best to remain impassive, although there are a few clues as to how he is feeling. If he is upset or mad about something, he will often have a blank stare on his face, one that says "I don't care what happens now". If he is happy, or at least in a good mood, he tends to grin a bit and, a bit more obviously, air guitar along with what ever song he is listening to, depending on the song. Although he doesn't look it, Sylo is actually quite energetic. Lazy yes, but in being lazy he bottles up all of his energy. At times, his energy will get the best of him, especially if he is in a particularly good mood, and he may act a little silly. These times don't happen often, but they still happen. Although he used to enjoy sparing with others, since coming to Shibusen, that has left him. Abilities: Technique Name: Soul Sight Effects/Description: With a relatively small amount of concentration, Sylo can see and feel other peoples souls if they are near enough. The closer they are the easier it is for him. To him, souls appear to be small flames that vary in size and color depending on the person and feel warmer the closer he gets to the person or people. Technique Name: Soul Track Effects/Description: As a result of Soul Sight, Sylo can track a specific Soul he sees. When he does this, the soul will appear brighter to him if it is within seeing distance and he will feel a gently tugging like sensation. He can track souls that are at a max of half a mile away, but it is difficult and he can become easily confused and mix up his target with other souls. The closer the soul the easier it is for him to track. Technique Name: Soul Clone Effects/Description: Sylo can sense the wave length of those around him and force his to watch almost exactly so that if there were any some else around that could sense souls, they wouldn't be able to pick his out unless they were extremely familiar with him or particularly adept at sensing souls. He will typically use this ability if he is in a large crowd, although it is not necessary. If he concentrates hard enough he can remember wave lengths he has copied before and copy them again. He can't do this for as long as he could if he could actually sense the wave length he is copying, only about half the time. (in sight = 6-8 posts)(remembering = 3-4 posts) Combat Style: Sylo prefers to let his opponent make the first move and then end the fight quickly there after, but if the fight drags on he will begin to attack rather than defend. When he fights, he can either flow from one position and attack to the next or strike as fast as an arrow and as random as a rain storm. It all depends on whom he is fighting and why. His abilities aren't quite masterful yet, but he would be a handful for most people. (intermediate). His weapon preference would be anything that is bladed, hes not exactly picky. Miscellaneous Information:
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| Imp of Chaos | Jan 25 2011, 08:14 AM Post #2 |
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Could you please get rid of
and any other explanations for the sections that may still be in here? :3 Clothing and Description could you please give us an idea of his skin tone? History Although there are one or two spelling/grammar errors, overall this is a good history. It explains Sylo nicely and helps to make the character cohesive. Well done~ Personality Does Sylo have any hobbies? You mention in the history that he enjoys sparing, has this changed since he entered Shibusen or is it still the case? :3 What does he do when he gets angry? How does he express happiness? Abilities soul sight – what do souls look/feel like? Can he see/feel through soul protect? What is the outermost range of the ability? Soul clone – how long can he keep it up for both when he is near someone and when he is trying to remember their wavelength? Double tap – when you say a large electric shock, do you mean a fatal one? Or something that might incapacitate an enemy (depending on their power level)? (basically, what kind of effects do you think a successful double tap would have on a person or kishin egg) Combat Style Sylo already has quite a few abilities for a beginning meister, so could you please define what level he is at in unarmed combat (ie. Rookie, intermediate, or master). Could you add in a little about his ability with a weapon and/or weapon preferences or if he wants to be a loner. Strengths and Weaknesses Could you please justify/elaborate on his speed and strength in the Combat section so I know that he isn't as fast as the speed of light and as strong as superman, as you haven't mentioned it much elsewhere. could you please elaborate a little more on these – for example you say bright lights are a weakness and loud sounds. Why? Is it because he makes bright lights and loud sounds all the time or is it because it frightens him? Could you re-write this, “fighting more than one opponent at once, meaning 2 opponents that are attacking at the same time rather than 5 that attack one at a time.” so that it makes more sense. 2 opponents are not 1 opponent, although I would have to agree that 5 opponents are more than 2. Does he do better fighting large groups than small groups, or small groups than large groups? Could you please add in some real battle weaknesses to match his strengths? At the moment he is speedy, strong, master of combat, with special soul strike abilities and no real weaknesses. Unless the kishin eggs require him to do some public speaking it would be great if you could think of ways he might fail in battle =P Overall This is an interesting profile, and I have enjoyed reading it – especially your history. I think that the abilities are quite unique and interesting for a meister but could do with a little bit more explanation. The whole profile is quite good, but could do with a glance through (although I know it was getting rather late when you finished it =P) You might also benefit from looking through our rules and guidelines one more time. |
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| Ka-HinoteKarite | Jan 25 2011, 06:34 PM Post #3 |
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Edited the areas stated.... |
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| Imp of Chaos | Jan 28 2011, 12:23 AM Post #4 |
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You still have : “The powers and special abilities that make your character different to a normal human being.” in your profile. Please make sure you are very careful in completing the requested modifications so I don't have to ask you more than once =P It'll get boring for you. Personality The additions you have made to this are really great; you've done a fantastic job fleshing out your character. Abilities I know I ask for a lot but could you please complete all of the edits I last asked for? I will continue modding when you have addressed everything ^___^ |
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| Ka-HinoteKarite | Jan 28 2011, 02:24 AM Post #5 |
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Its fine, you only ask because it needs to be done...I'm sorry I'm making you repeat yourself >.< I think I managed to fix what you asked for so that it is now satisfactory... Edited by Ka-HinoteKarite, Jan 28 2011, 02:25 AM.
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| Shinigami | Jan 28 2011, 09:06 AM Post #6 |
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Yoii Ka-Hi! Description: Sylo looks like quite the punk~ Very well described :3 Perhaps you have some personal experience with this clothing? History: I know the ‘lazy but an awesome fighter and loves to fight’ is a fairly common theme in characters, and you don’t need to change this, but I think you could tweak it a bit to make the character flow a lot better It takes an awful lot of work to get even semi-decent at fighting, and it takes a proactive person to start beating up hoodlums or asking kids to fight him and teach them their cool moves.But yes. You don’t have to change this, but I think it would improve your character =3 Soul Sight: Could you please split ‘soul sensing / tracking’ from ‘soul sight’? :3 And perhaps go into a bit more detail about it? eg: If he has to have met that person before, or have met them lots of times, or if they need to be close or far away … You get the idea ^__^ Could you please also choose Soul Clone or Double Tap, but not both abilities? You can learn the other one after Sylo completes a few missions, but for a Shibusen ‘novice’ he seems to know a lot of techniques ![]() Strengths/Weaknesses: Could you explain why he is good at collecting information? There didn’t seem to be a personality trait or ability that lends itself to this. Perhaps go into a bit more detail about how he is good at collecting information? ![]() Overall: I can see you've put quite a bit of effort into the profile and its paying off! It looks quite good and polished :3 |
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| Ka-HinoteKarite | Jan 28 2011, 03:50 PM Post #7 |
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Thanks, I'm trying to get it fixed ^^; History: I though I had addressed that? He's just lazy when it comes to work, like manual labor, other wise he is rather active. Abilities: I'm not sure what you mean by "split", could you explain, please? Alright, the only reason I had 3 was being I had been told that 3 was ok to have. Strength/Weakness: I could elaborate on why he is good at gathering information, but I did say he would rather watch and listen than participate, but you're right, I'll add somethings in to support this. Edited?: yes Edited by Ka-HinoteKarite, Jan 28 2011, 04:09 PM.
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| Shinigami | Jan 29 2011, 03:38 AM Post #8 |
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Thanks for the prompt edits ~ Laziness: I guess I’m just a little bit confused about his laziness. At times it seems like he is lazy for everything, eg:
But then at other times ‘lazy’ just means ‘does not like to do things.’ (eg: manual labour). I think you are okay to leave the laziness as it is, but I think the people who read the profile will read ‘he is very lazy’ and think of Shikamaru Nara from Naruto (the lazy smart guy who was lazy 24/7). Soul Sight: Could you please change the ability soul sight from ‘He can see souls, and then also follow them’ to:
Overall: You're very close to approval! ^___^ Only 1 thing to modify ( and 1 extra optional modification)! |
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| Ka-HinoteKarite | Jan 29 2011, 04:13 AM Post #9 |
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Requested edit has been made. |
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| Shinigami | Jan 29 2011, 06:18 AM Post #10 |
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If you want you can still have the "I track people using soul perception," I just wanted you have it as a different ability, rather than as the same ability as soul perception. =3 |
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It takes an awful lot of work to get even semi-decent at fighting, and it takes a proactive person to start beating up hoodlums or asking kids to fight him and teach them their cool moves.
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