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| KingRave | Jan 6 2011, 04:32 AM Post #1 |
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[Locke Kresnik Rambo III] [Meister] Character Name: Locke Kresnik Rambo III Age: 17 Gender: Male Type: Meister Partnered? Not not the moment Image: Locke Rambo Clothing and description: Locke is a somewhat typical teenager. he is tall, and slim. (height of five feet to take a guess) despite his looks. He has grey hair, and light blue eyes. He always wears his trademark Pirate Captain Coat in which he has multiple pockets on the inside for holding traps such as smoke bombs, flash grenades, and mini bear traps. Besides his coat that gains him much attention. The coat, due to being full with various things, constantly make noises and such. Despite all the noise he tends to make, his coat seemingly manages to look slim. he also wears normal jeans and white and black shoes. History: Locke lived most of his life in his home in Nevada. Often causing trouble for the living in the area, such as theft (Something that is still a bad habit for Locke, due to his brash and reckless spirit). His father John Rambo is a archeologist working for Shibusen and His partner/wife Maria Kresnik a golem technician. these two are assigned to hunt down dangerous Kishin egg's, Demon tools and other forces that plot against Shibusen. Due to being tied to this job constantly, they are mostly out at work for long periods of time... Time, Locke uses to train his body and mind, preparing for whatever came his way and for his future what ever that might be. He never knew of his parents true job or what it involved. But he never questioned it. He hadn't been told what they were always up to but they managed to get him with excuses. Even if he could tell they were lying. While they left he would be taken care of by his aunt. Suddenly on duty, Maria is attacked by a dangerous Kishin. and in the chaos of the fight taken away from John. Locke began to question his mother's disappearance and blamed his father. But for a short time. John finally confessed to what had happen and what his and maria's real professions were, while not going to far into details. He tells Locke that one of the weapons he mentioned(Demon Weapons) could possibly lead to him finding Maria....Or resurrecting her if she was gone. Even with Locke's family around, John believed that someone could possibly have been plotting against him and his wife. So instead. he took Locke with him. Years passed and Locke grew into a strong young man. Capable of defending him self against the Kishin eggs he and his father and fought against over the years. A important Demon Weapon capturing became quite out of hand once his father encountered the dormant dark weapon known as the Legendary Izanagi. The Dark Weapon had now woke due to their arrival. Izanagi possessed John. However his great willpower kept him from being mentally overwhelmed by the weapon. The dark weapon in his body managed to force John to attack his son. Who confused but understanding of the situation, fled the scene remembering his father mentioning that shibusen was the establishment that he worked for. Locke now traveled back to his home of Nevada where he located Shibusen. Learning on the way that it was a school for meisters, he decided to come to Shibusen to become stronger and to learn more about his mother and father's history with the school, in hopes to finally rescue them both from their desperate fates. Personality: Locke has been called many things. Bold, Brash and Reckless its these things that give him the courage and strength to make it through anything. His willpower is where his unlosing spirit comes from and is one of his best traits. Locke never gives up on what he's put his mind to. Even if it kills him. You could say he's a dangerous person to know. He tends to show his personality among anyone, even Shinigami. Meeting and befriending Locke is quite the trouble. He always moves and is very active, making it hard for others to keep up with him. Bold because of his brave to go into the unknown. brash because of his full trust in his skills and strength and reckless, because of his tendency to not think about his actions from time to time. When he is mad he tends to cause trouble among his friends or just avoid and ignore everyone in general. When he is in a good mood however he is quite playful with everyone even if it annoys them. He dislikes Kishin and evil demon weapons due to what they have done to his family. He also dislikes people who consider him stupid or unintelligent. He does have a strong sense of justice(to an extent. His sense of justice wills him to think that "if its not my problem i wont bother it"). But will change this in a heartbeat depending on the situation. Like his stealing addiction for example. While on a mission if Locke sees something he likes, he wont hesitate to take it. And will begin to even take things useless to him. But after his rush is over and he realizes there useless to him he just tosses them aside. Another important example of his change in justice, is his want for power. His father and mother being in trouble, makes him constantly wanting more power. More knowledge to seem less useless. When a opportunity to get more powerful appears, he will take it. He also has a tendency to force problems on to others, also to force others into something they don't want to do, for his own gain. these problems tend to tilt his Good/Bad meter. Abilities: Special Tech -------------------- Technique Name: Lookout Effects/Description: Allows enhanced sight for a good 10 minutes. This heightens his eyesight to allow him easy access to find what he is looking for or hunting down. This ability causes Locke's eyes do dilate, focusing in and out and vise-versa. Thus his eyes enhanced, can allow him to see farther or closer up just like a telescope. He also can see through dense fog, smoke ect .The Cooldown for this ability is the same amount of time for which it last while in use. A technique taught to him by his father while in search for Kishin eggs. Also another thing to note is that while he is in Lookout move he can only move to a certain speed. Such as how a person with a real telescope would turn and zoom in and zoom out. thus its not exactly best for combat but for finding the enemy first. Technique Name: Pocket Traps Effects/Description: The multiple pockets in Locke's captain coat are lined with various traps such as flash grenades, mini bear traps, smoke bombs, and throwing stars .ect. These traps can only be used once and once he has used them all up Locke must restock his pockets. How ever this requires him to be at Shibusen or any weapon shops. Very risky to use during missions and must be used wisely and effectively. His ammunition is limited depending on how many times he uses the weapons. 3 of each in his pockets. This move is risky while in missions because there is no certainty that said traps wont hit other allies. Also due to the fact that they can run out using them excessively will lead to the pocket traps being unable to be used once they are used up, and cannot be used till arriving back in Shibusen after mission. (so that he can restock) Weapons/Items in pockets/Amount ----------------------- Smoke Bombs/for quick getaway's typical smoke bomb. Flash Grenades/flash grenades, like smoke bomb but more for during combat. Mini Bear Traps/Mini bear traps used to catch the foe. these bear traps can cause quite the pain to the victim but not leg breaking pain. Throwing Stars/Typical ninja like throwing stars. Caltrops/Caltrops for taking out tires or stopping a barefooted enemy in his tracks. Combat Style: His style is formed from Fourside Elite Grappling+street fighting techniques. His attacks are mostly counter attacks, grabs and hard hits. The grappling is a style created by Locke, mainly consistant of greco roman grappling skills and typical wrestling moves (made up the name ._.), while street fighting is a common fighting prowess that he picked up in his home town suburbs. This style of fighting is a conjoined mix of three styles Locke has mastered one by one. Basically it was formed as a way to combat armed foes. This being a mix of three of Locke's most achieved fighting styles he's a master of it. And the only one currently using it. Understandably, this being Locke's own created style and being the only person to use it he has mastered it. How ever. despite this he is not incredibly perfect at it. Just very good at in in comparison.(well considering no one else uses it....in comparison he is the best at it.... ._.) Miscellaneous Information: Strengths:
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Roleplay Sample: Locke ran to the edge of the cliff. This was the end of the line. Soldiers surrounded him. Prepared to shoot. "Your going to make this hard for every one aren't you?" Locke said as he edged closer to them foolishly. One solider flinched seeming a bit hesitant of shooting Locke. "What? Scared? Feelin' lucky?" He said grinning at the solider on the far left. However they never responded. Probably never even spoke English before. Guns for hire....go figure. They had came for something Locke had hidden in his pockets. "So...you come out shoot me and take the prize. Right? Well here." And Locke tossed it to them. The artifact they had been looking for. But not alone. Taped to the artifact was a.... "BOOM FLASH GRENADE" a quick burst of light blinded the mercenaries, sending most of them into a blind panic leading a few of them to run right off the cliff. It hadn't mattered to Locke anymore. he had already used the artifact to its extent. Useless now. He Vanished into the night as the blind soldiers fell to their doom. Now with all his matters handled. On To Shibusen. To be continued.....(Wrap) Edited by KingRave, Jan 12 2011, 11:46 PM.
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| Shinigami | Jan 6 2011, 05:44 AM Post #2 |
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Hi Rok~ Could you make this more of a Soul Eater character? At the moment it sounds like it is from a video game~ I'd love for you to go into more detail as well in all aspects of the profile :3 Presume we know nothing, so you will need to tell us everything :3 Like what is a Pirate Coat and how did he get all his powers?
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| KingRave | Jan 7 2011, 01:19 AM Post #3 |
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Edited Also. his powers are not to be found out yet. they will be revealed as he learns more of his mother and father's disappearance. And a Captain Pirate's Coat should be pretty self exclamatory. http://www.twinrosesdesigns.com/coat_nearly_done.jpg basically that but only it is more Grey and gold instead of the color of that one and lined with pockets on the inside. :T Edited by KingRave, Jan 7 2011, 04:01 AM.
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| KingRave | Jan 7 2011, 10:18 PM Post #4 |
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| Shinigami | Jan 8 2011, 02:50 AM Post #5 |
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Okay, here goes the next round of modding~! Description: Could you go into a tad more detail? :3 We know pratically nothing about him! For instance, is he 1 foot high or 20 feet? What does his hair look like? Not colours, but style :3 You've filled in the extreme minimum of detail (hair colour, eye colour, clothes) but I'd really love for you to put in a tad more effort and give the description a good spit 'n polish ![]() Also, everyone has different ideas of what a Pirate Coat is, so it would be great if you at minimum linked the reader to an image of one in your profile (Your current image does not work)History:
Why didn't he know? What did he think they do? Why did he train? Just as a general note every Weapon is a Demon Weapon. Soul is a Demon Weapon. The Thomspon sisters are demon weapons @_@ You might mean the rare & elusive 'Dark Weapons' like Crona and Tsubaki's brother? If you mean a normal Demon Weapon, why is the father capturing them? Could you please go into more detail~?
Do you mean the Kishin Asura or just a general kishin egg? Personality: At the moment it is a bit of a list of traits. Could you turn that list into sentences and give us an idea of what it would be like to meet Locke? Perhaps you could also explain how he got his nicknames, and who might call him that? Abilities: He has too many at the moment for a soul eater site. I'm not sure what universe this character was initially created for, but we will have to tone down how many abilities he starts off with. He can learn these over time (once every 3 threads you earn the ability to write a training thread to gain a new power). Could you please choose two abilities only? Could you please go into significantly more detail for those 2 abilities? ^__^ Things like what he can do with it, if there is a 'cool down' or a 'casting time.' Draw backs are great to add in if applicable, as well as the range of the technique. Of course, don't forget to mention how Locke does the techniques, and what it does to the enemy! Combat style: You've done a great start here, but could you also describe what Greek wrestling is? Also, is he super awesome at this, or kinda lame? Weaknesses: These seem to have no bearing at all in relation to the profile. Could you put in the history / personality why these are weaknesses? Does he also have any style-weaknesses? eg: He is slow, or he is dumb, or he is really bad at fighting fast opponents. |
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| KingRave | Jan 10 2011, 04:19 AM Post #6 |
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| Shinigami | Jan 10 2011, 08:07 AM Post #7 |
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Thanks for the edit ![]() Description: I can see you made an attempt here Given we have a lot of artists I think it would really help if you defined things a bit better. Is he tall? Is he short? What do you mean by 'kinda long' hair? I'd love for you to describe the character so the reader can know what Locke looks like If you don't know things like his size, take a guess! He is your character so you could decide he is tall or short~Personality: Personality: At the moment it is a bit of a list of traits. Could you turn that list into sentences and give us an idea of what it would be like to meet Locke? Perhaps you could also explain how he got his nicknames, and who might call him that? Abilities: Could you please limit Lookout to only eyesight, and explain a little bit better what it does? Does it mean he can see for further, or is it more like he is suddenly looking through a telescope (if you know what I mean. If you don't, just tell me)? You mention he has a limited number of items in his pockets. You could please define exactly what they are if this is important to the ability? Could you also explain why it is very risky to use? Combat Style: Could you explain a little bit about the grappling? @_@ You mention that it is Greco-Roman but also that he invented it? Could you also please mention whether he is an awesome fighter or a bad one? (eg: could he beat a 5 year old? Could he beat Death the Kid?) Please also mention in here that he is super duper strong? ![]() Weaknesses: Why are they possible? |
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| KingRave | Jan 11 2011, 01:51 AM Post #8 |
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| Shinigami | Jan 11 2011, 06:52 AM Post #9 |
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You've got some contradictory information in here and some repeated information, could you please clean it up please? I'm sure remember but at 42 we make sure everyone tries their best when they make profiles so they can be proud of them And to help everyone become better RPers to boot! ![]() Personality: I'm sorry if I've been hard to understand for this. At the moment you do not describe his personality, but describe things about his personality. As an example you say he shows his personality to everyone. Could you please also describe his personality? To simplify things could dedicate at least one sentence per trait to the following traits you mention.
Abilities: Please say the cooldown time is always 10 or 20 minutes for eyesight. I think this is fair because it is so useful and strong. If you think this is unfair please tell me why. Because you say he has a limit of Pocket Traps, could you give us an idea of how many he has at any one time? Does he have only 2, or does he have more like 200? Why is Pocket Traps "Very risky to use during missions" |
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| KingRave | Jan 11 2011, 11:39 PM Post #10 |
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At the moment it sounds like it is from a video game~ I'd love for you to go into more detail as well in all aspects of the profile :3 Presume we know nothing, so you will need to tell us everything :3 Like what is a Pirate Coat and how did he get all his powers?

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